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SUMMARY: Jonathan spends the afternoon playing with Lucy, the daughter of his father's fiancée, and her friends, Penny, Anna, and Francesca. | ||||||||||||||||||||
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COMMENTARY: Don't be fooled by the title. This story has absolutely nothing to do with Playboy. I didn't know exactly what was going to happen in this story, but I had a pretty good idea of the sorts of things were going to happen. Given the length, I had my doubts about the author's ability to keep it fresh and interesting. I am happy to report that the author did a great job with both of these aspects. In other words, I was both aroused by the story and curious to see how it turned out. It did not matter one bit that I have read and enjoyed stories with similar plots. Why? Because, this story kept my interest and didn't fizzle. Definitely a superior effort. | ||||||||||||||||||||
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TECHNICALLY SPEAKING: I love how the author breaks the story up into little chapters. They serve to structure the story just as paragraphs serve structure a page. I wish that more authors would break their stories into little chapters. Even if the story is short and there are only two or three chapters, it makes a difference. The lack of spelling and grammatical errors leads me to conclude that this story was edited by someone who knows their craft. | ||||||||||||||||||||
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SLIGHTLY OFF-TOPIC: I wonder if this story would work with one woman and four men. I'm not sure if it would or not, but I am sure that for it to be as entertaining as this one is it would also have to be different in some other ways. For example, I think that the woman would have to be the one calling the shots, otherwise the men would probably be all over her in no time flat. | ||||||||||||||||||||
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LINK(S) This is the second in a series of four stories. I have chosen to spotlight only this one. Here are links to all the stories in the sequence in which they probably should be read: The New Playmate The New Playmate's Friends The New Playmate's Classmate The New Playmate's Game Behind Closed Doors [Author's Website] | ||||||||||||||||||||