COMMENTARY: Some stories take time to develop and set the scene before they get sexy. This is not one of those stories. This one had me standing tall after the first couple paragraphs. It isn't so much what ends up happening as it is how it ends up happening. It is the fact that Chasey is both horrified and aroused by her friend's revelation. It is the fact that Chasey doesn't give in easy to temptation or lose her doubts too quickly. It is the fact that the author takes her time and decribes all the juicy details.
How or why Chasey maintains her doubts about her fantasies and her relationship with her father is unimportant. What matters is the fact that she does and that the author does a convincing job describing Chasey's state of mind.
The one drawback, in my opinion is the fact that part of the story is poorly formatted. The first half or third of the story is well formatted, but after a point it is just one long paragraph. I usually avoid stories that are poorly formatted, but in this case I decided to make an exception and am glad that I decided to do so.
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