COMMENTARY:
I'm not sure exactly why I enjoyed this story as much
as I did. It does not compare favorably to some other stories that
I like. The author has an annoying habit of not breaking up his
story into short paragraphs. Instead, his story is composed of,
what I consider to be, extremely long paragraphs. Each of these
paragraphs could or should, my opinion again, be broken down into
several shorter ones.
His characters are also rather straight-forward. There isn't all
that much conflict within them. His characters often voice
objections to some of the acts they end up committing, e.g.
incest, but they either don't sound sincere or sound so sincere
that I find myself rolling my eyes and thinking, "Yeah. Okay.
Whatever." Quite often the characters seemed more like caricatures
than they did like real people.
So what do I like about this story? I like the fact that the
author doesn't cut to the chase too fast. He draws the action out
and doesn't have his characters jumping in the sack together
before he takes the time to set the scene. The story is also
nicely paced.
Even if I did find the characters to be a bit lacking, in all
fairness, I should also point out one quality that the cast
possesses that struck me: they are all distinct. Jenny and Mary
aren't carbon copies of each another. Does this make up for all
the other problems I have with the characters? No, but it did
stand out in my mind as I was reading the story.
Finally, I enjoyed the fantasy or scenario that the author
describes in this story. I realize that not everyone will be
turned on by this fantasy, but if I am going to recommend a story
then I should at least be honest as to why I am recommending it. |