OoPS: 373

Title	Haircut
Author	Sidney Durham
Story Code(s)	M/F
Story Theme(s)	--
Length	4,300 words
Arousal	5 out of 5
Plot and Characters	5 out of 5
Editing	5 out of 5
Objective Analysis	10.0 out of 10
Subjective Analysis	Excellent
Summary	Sidney is getting his haircut by Marie, when she brings up the subject of blowjobs.
Commentary	The author takes his time and allows the tension to build between Marie and Sidney. Marie teases Sidney. Sidney is painfully aroused. I felt his pain. This story is extremely arousing. This story is very nicely put together. For the most part, it consists of two elements, (a) a running conversation between Sidney and Marie and (b) Sidney's nonverbal asides. Both were nicely done; neither of them felt forced. The conversation goes a long ways towards fleshing out the two characters. The asides added a little more to Sidney's character and were humorous at the same time. There is some sex at the end of the story. This is a very well written story. I loved this story. It is both extremely arousing and very well written. I like stories with dialogue in them, and this one has plenty of it, but it is more than the quantity of the dialogue, it is the quality of it. I have given it an Excellent, under Subjective Analysis.