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Title	Orange County Babylon [Part 6 of 8]
Author	MichaelD38
Story Code(s)	M/F, F/F, Teen
Length	8,400 words
Rating	--
Summary	Jack breaks up with Summer. The football team wins the championship.
Commentary	Like the previous five parts, this part is well written. Two things do occur to me. One, there is a lot of football in this story. I like football and can appreciate what is being described. I can imagine that someone who does not care for football might skip over some of the lengthy descriptions of games. Two, things have been going just a bit too sweetly, lately. I am waiting for the ball to drop. If it does not I will probably be some what disappointed.