OoPS: 239

Title	Orange County Babylon [Part 5 of 8]
Author	MichaelD38
Story Code(s)	M/F, F/F, Teen
Length	17,100 words
Rating	--
Summary	Jack gets closer to Kelly and Becky, Karen gets sick, and Summer and Jack experience some ups and downs.
Commentary	I'm starting to run out of things to say. The story progresses nicely, yada, yada, yada. I am starting to think that stretching the story out over such a long period of time was not such a good idea. There is a lot that happens in this novel, but at the same time the action is somewhat cyclical. Things are up for Jack, then they are down, then they are up again, etc. This is a well written, enjoyable, occasionally arousing novel, it is just that I now remember why I usually stick to short stories.