Alley of OoPS : 201

Title

Orange County Babylon [Part 1 of 8]

Author

MichaelD38

Story Code(s)

M/F, M/F/F, M/F/F/F/F/F/F

Length

15,500 words

Rating

Very Good

Summary

Jack discovers sex, after moving in with Karen and her mother.

Commentary

I found this, the first installment, both arousing and disturbing. On the one hand Jack is aroused by the situation, on the other he is convinced that what he is doing is wrong. I take this as an indication that he has a sense of responsibility; how refreshing.

I did not give this part of the story a higher rating because there is not enough character or plot development. On the other hand, it does show a lot of promise.