COMMENTARY:
Great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It is very well
paced; not too fast, not too slow. The author sets the scene and
then allows the story to evolve. I am also impressed by the main
character, Ricky. He seems realistic enough. The range of emotions
that he experiences seem appropriate given the situation. He is
both aroused and embarrased, tentative and eager. I am also
grateful that the women in this story aren't clones of one
another.
In my opinion, there's just one problem with the story: the
typographical errors. They are numerous enough for me to say
something but not so numerous that they interfered with my ability
to enjoy the story.
I think that this story should appeal to both male and female
readers, possibly to varying degrees. I strongly recommend that
you give it a try. |