Practice Makes Perfect - My Commentary
This story really exploded on me. It started out as a simple sex scene, the final one with the woman bouncing around on the piano keyboard. But then I got bored of the story and set it aside for almost a year.
When I came back to it, I had a story idea bouncing around in my mind. I was interested in exploring sexual passion and where it comes from.
So I played around with it, expanded on it, and tried to think of where this particular character would find sexual passion within himself. Where does a man who has spent years practicing the piano find the drive and desire to have passionate sex?
Honestly, the main character didn't really lend himself to answering this question, but I forced it on him anyway. The three old girlfriends made their appearance to give a little historical perspective.
I'm not sure, but I think this character had sexual passion within him the entire time, he just didn't know how to show it. It's hinted at with the hunger in his stare for women, and the way he sort of broods about women and sex. In some sense, his experience with women is echoed in his experience playing the piano - practice makes perfect, after all.
Of the ex-girlfriends, I like the Peggy character the best, simply because she's a little crazy. Which is too bad, because Sylvia is probably the most important one to the story. But there you go. If there is any problem with the story, as far as I'm concerned, it's that there are too many women, and it's easy to get them confused.
I like the narrator a lot. In some sense, he's like me, although in other ways he's very different. For one thing, I don't know how to play the piano!
As a complete, balanced story, I think I did pretty well with this one. But I think it's also a bit vague, and doesn't have the big homerun ending that some of the other stories I've written have. Honestly, I like the open ending, but I suspect this story won't be as well received as most.
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