Very Well Aged

Itís quite simple. These are my notes about the stories posted here, as well as other work related issues that do not belong in an index. It is a kind of a blog except that I do not allow comments from others here. So if you want to interact with me you still need to go to the bottom and fill out the form.

Always!

All my stories, regardless of whether they reference "Jake," exist within the world of one or two possible Threads. A few stories reference a specific Jake and those really need to be read as corollaries, being grounded in a specific Jake world. Fully, to understand any of my Philippine stories, it is best to have already read either Jake-Joyfully or Jake with Ganda. All stories even though not directly tied to any Jake, just donít include background, language explanations and such that is covered in the longer Jake stories. For that reason, having read either, the story with Joy or Ganda, is very helpful. Failure to do that will make the other stories both confusing and less enjoyable.

15 December 2014
Valid Email addresses

If you send me an email and expect a response, please make sure you enter a valid return address for yourself on the form. Today I got email from a fellow with the return address rick@asstr.org. But there is no such address and so a detailed response Rick would have gotten will go unsent.

30 November 2014
Retirement major re-edit

I have just completed a major re-edit of Retirement. This was not just some misspelled words, but a reworking of the text having to do with how I handle dialogue. I further cleared up some confusion in the text, in a few places, added text in others. The story remains the same, but it should read much smoother, with fewer places that will cause the eye to stop with loss of clarity. I also added improved footnoting in the html code format. All formats have been updated.

24 November 2014
Trifecta rework

I was alerted to an incorrect word in this story last week. I fixed that immediately, but noted that there were past/present tense problems in it as well. And so, tonight, I edited it for that, changed a few sentences while I was at it, and reposted in all formats. If you have an older version of this story, I urge you to replace it with the corrected version.

21 November 2014
The continuing hiatus

Things continue to be busy here. I have little time and expect this will not change for approximately four more months and maybe six. Further I am beginning to wonder if my Philippines series of stories should be ended. While there are, and will always be, more tales that can be told, maybe I have plowed this ground quite enough. For those of you who are burried under snow in parts of the USA, I suspect a new tale, would be to your liking right now. Maybe it would keep your mind off the worry that your roof will come caving in on you. Here, the weather remains warm pleasant. Our days are interspersed with birthdays, holidays, weddings, funerals, christenings, and the mundane duties of shopping and paying bills. The roadsides always have displays of bushes in bloom, coconut trees with clusters of the fruit ready for the taking, and with tricycles, motorcycles, jeepneys, oxen pulling carts, and pedestrians, all contending for use of the narrow roads, both paved and dirt, with cars, SUV's, pickups and trucks. There is in truth an adundance of some of the most lovely women in the world here. Their bloodlines, an admixture, of various asian (Filipino, Chinese, Japanese) and european heritages, more so than other asian communities in surronding nations. On any given day, I can, if I choose, smile at a young lovely girl and get an enthusiastic response along with a big smile. Life here is crazy and I am most certainly not the only guy here who knows this. As it is, at the moment, I am out the door by 7AM and back home exhausted for supper most days. All the crazy stuff continues to swirl around. I see it, but have no time to comment on it through a story. And then yesterday I began to wonder, have I told enough of all this?

27 October 2014
Adding AZW3 versions

I have added AZW3 versions for the collected works.

27 October 2014
Reposting ePub and mobi versions

The reposting yesterday was to fix language in the release info. Today I am reposting again, but this time it is only cosmetic to fix problems with blank pages that show up after conversion from the document.

18 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

The PDF, ePub and mobi releases of Gimme Shelter are now posted. This story is now complete. There were some final edits of all including the HTML version. To those intrepid souls who assisted in sending in proofing comments thoughout the creation of this story, I wish to thank you. You made this story better if for no other reason that errors, typos, homonyms and other gaffs were corrected due to your sharp eyes. There are very few things that distract a reader more than such things! All those who enjoy this story, do so far more because of your efforts.

17 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 20, the final chapter, of Gimme Shelter is now posted as HTML. I will wait a day or so, make sure the gramatical and spelling errors have been corrected before posting the PDF, ePub and mobi versions.

15 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 19 of Gimme Shelter is now posted.

13 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 18 of Gimme Shelter is now posted.

12 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 17 of Gimme Shelter is now posted. It doesn't seem quite right but we are over 55000 words in this story. It has sub-plots and chapters, so I gather it qualifies as a novel, though, so far, a short one. It will most likely end as a short novel. I am not sure exactly which story comes next. I have a number of them, back burnered. But things are busy here and I might take some time off.

06 October 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 16 of Gimme Shelter is posted. This portion is a darker tale, and some of you will not like it for that reason. But this is where the story needs to go.

26 September 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

I posted Chapter 15 of Gimme Shelter yesterday. The next chapter is in progress. I hope to have it done in the next couple of days. We will see how that goes.

05 September 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 14 of Gimme Shelter is posted. God help me, but I can't see that I will have time now for another before the fourth week of the month.

03 September 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 13 of Gimme Shelter is posted. If I can post the next chapter by the 7th, it will be the last one before the fourth week of September. Otherwise, this is the last one until late September. I will be on a scouting trip for most of the month.

26 August 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 12 of Gimme Shelter is posted. The next will come soon, but for a few days.

25 August 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

Chapter 11 of Gimme Shelter is posted.

24 August 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

OK, chapter 10 of Gimme Shelter is posted. The next will come soon, but not this weekend.

23 August 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

OK, chapter 9 of Gimme Shelter is posted.

17 August 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter / Rework: Rainy Season, and other stories

I have this week posted another chapter of Gimme Shelter. I have also been cleaning up other stories. Today I found over 200 hundred grammar and spelling errors in The Rainy Season. The result is that I reposted all four formats of that today. All the short stories have been given that treatment and I am working through the rest as time permits. My time is fractured these days and I don't have many prolonged periods where I can sit down with Gimme Shelter, but the editting can be done in those shorter moments. At the present I have half of chapter 9 written, but am not sure I can get back to it for another week. We will see. I am sorry for the delays, but the only option to stringing out the chapters, is to not post any chapter until the story is finished. As it can take as much as a year, to write a long story, I have been encouraged by some of you to post these stories in serial fashion. If that is wrong, I am all ears.

25 July 2014
A newspaper headline worth noting!

I have had to take a break from writing Gimme Shelter, as things here are very busy, in a good way. But I am still here, and this morning, as I drank my native coffee, and enjoyed some local fruit, I ran across this headline in my newspaper. It was too good not to share it. So here is is!

13 July 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

I have posted chapter 7 of Gimme Shelter. As this is a work in process, errors may exist. Please report them via the comment section at the bottom of the last chapter posted.

09 July 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

I have posted chapter 6 of Gimme Shelter. As this is a work in process, errors may exist. Please report them via the comment section at the bottom of the last chapter posted.

09 July 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

I have posted chapter 5 of Gimme Shelter. As this is a work in process, errors may exist. Please report them via the comment section at the bottom of the last chapter posted.

08 July 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

I got busy and posted the first four chapters of Gimme Shelter.

05 July 2014
Current work: Gimme Shelter

As I mentioned before, I am shelving The Old Man from Powder River for a bit. I have just completed two chapters of a new story, titled Gimme Shelter. Once I get a few more chapters completed, I will start posting. However, this will be serialized as there is not way I want to work for six months or so before posting any work. So expect to see something next week or the week after. My dance card is busy for the next three days at a minimum so I am not sure about the exact timing.

01 July 2014
The Joshua Tree.

I found about a dozen errors in the text of The Joshua Tree, fixed them and reposted all formats of the story.

20 June 2014
PDF, ePub and mobi releases.

All stories are now in four formats, HTML, PDF, ePub and mobi. The links to the HTML have been moved to the HTML button below the name of the story. As far as I can tell all the links are good and working.

17 June 2014
PDF, ePub and mobi releases.

I have created all three formats for two of the short stories, The Whale, and Trifecta, as well as the PDF of The Rainy Season. (The reason there is no mobi or epub of this last piece has to do with the complexity of the format. The problems with that file are huge and I may need to split it into two or three sections to get it into the other formats.) Would a few of you be so kind as to tell me if what I have posted are OK on your devices, before I try to covert the rest?

You can find the files in the following locatons:

15 June 2014
PDF release of The Rainy Season:

I have created a PDF book of The Rainy Season. It has paganation, footnotes on the page of reference, photos referenced at the end of the chapter in question, and links to outside websites are preserved. Some errors in the orginal text of the story has been corrected here and on the website as well. The standard link is on the Index page, but since I know some of you are lazy, here it is.

13 June 2014
Reformatting and what's next:

I have just finished a PDF version of The Rainy Season as a complete book with hyperlinks preserved in most cases. Where the link was to a picture, it is now included at the end of the chapter. Footnotes are also preserved. The PDF size is 2.429Mb. The ZIP would save only a little bit at 2.27MB. I have not uploaded it to the site yet. Does anyone what it?

I have also re-editted my only non-fiction work, Meeting Johna as it was a mess that needed fixing to make it more readable. That is done and it as been re-posted. Please let me know it you are still having problems with it.

11 June 2014
Reformatting and what's next:

I have re-posted all my fiction stories, after modifying the left and right margins on them all, to move text away from the scroll bars a bit. I have also had a comment that the text was too small. However as a ctrl+ increases the font size on your browser, I see no reason to increase the basic font size. If you think that is a poor choice, you are welcome to make a comment related to that below.

I have The Old Man From Powder River set up to be the next... however, that story is still sort of working itelf out in the real world, so I am just not sure it is time for that. I have a few other stories sketched out in a synopsis form and think I may work on one of these next. I am just not sure yet. I will most likely not be posting anything new for a month.

10 June 2014
Current Work / Completed!: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 55, the final chapter of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find.

10 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 54 of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find.

09 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 53 of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find.

08 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 52 of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find.

08 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 51 of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find.

07 June 2014
Pet Peeves

I asked for error catching and I do mean it as those of you who have sent me corrections know. And there are a few evidently in Chapter 50 of The Rainy Season. I am pleased to fix them! However, when someone asks a question AND then suggests a fix, but (1) the answer is 'no' and (2) so no fix is needed and (3) (here is the irritating part,) sends the comments annonymously, well no I can't fix what is already right and hey, no I didn't ignore 'you.' Or when the annonymous guy suggests I should set the chapter aside for a while before re-reading and posting, as if I didn't. Well anyway, it's just a pet peeve...

06 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

Here is Chapter 50 of The Rainy Season. Please let me know of any errors you find. I am trying to post these as soon as I can and the error checking is less robust that it ought to be.

04 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have looked back and note that I started work on The Rainy Season last year in the second week of July. At first it was going to be a quick, four chapter piece, but based on your requests for a longer format story, I reworked the first four chapters in September and starting to post chapters. The problem with this story was that, as a long format piece, the natual end was a very long way off from the start. I knew that, before I started the rework. And so you, who had asked for a long format piece may have gotten a far longer peice than you wanted. We are still a ways away from bringing the story to conclusion. Once again I am not giving anything away to note that at the moment, the story must resolve Analyn's need for resolution of, with whom, and where, she will land. We have a shorter term issue with Gerlyn. This one is sort of fun. We have to deal again with Iay and find the rightful place for her in the family. We are learning some new things about Joy2x and that will bring some more interesting times. We have many marriages to deal with, and finally, how many more kids will there be, and from which of the girls will they come? We are well over 150,000 words and so this, I guess qualifies, as my first full length novel.

I have posted Chapter 49 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

02 June 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 48 of The Rainy Season. I had particular fun with this chapter and hope you all like it. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

31 May 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 47 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

30 May 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I found continuity problems in chatpers 40 and 45. These have been fixed. I found a logic problem in chapter 41 and that has been remedied. I have posted Chapter 46 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

29 May 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 45 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

24 May 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 44 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

8 May 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 43 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

8 April 2014
Hiatus from Current Work: The Rainy Season

As you have probably already guessed, I have taken a brief hiatus from the current tale. Real life intrudes from time to time. But for those who don't understand the life of the average Filiupino in the provinces, I would like to share three pics. To preserve their anonymity, in one of the photo's (here), even though these girls are of legal age, and are fully clothed, I have blocked their faces. We invited them over as they are friends of one of my girls here, but here they are at another home doing their own cooking. I also include a couple of snaps (here and here) of one of their homes. Finally, for those of you who doubt my use of names in some of the stories, I took a snap of an article from The Philippine Daily Inquirer. I have neither defined Tanda (in this case meaning aged) nor Kuya (older brother or older male) before, but as you should know by now, Pogi is handsome. These three guys are Philippine Senators accused of great "plunder" or theft of public funds. The sums are the equivilent of hundred of millions of US dollars. And yes, BongBong is the son of the Dictator Marcos and yes he and his siblings are all elected members of the current government. Don't get me started on this! :-)

As to the living conditions you see in these photos, consider that if a guy from a first world country shows up and smiles at you and offers you an opportunity to escape that world, what would you do to permanently escape?

27 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 42 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

24 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 41 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

22 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 40 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

The difference between The Rainy Season and earlier work: When many of you said you wanted a longer piece, I gave it some real thought. My earlier 'long' pieces had not used many subplots. I didn't have characters who came and went and reappeared. They were pretty linear stories. I was investigating an issue, a preoccupation, a driving force and took the concept out for a spin. If something didn't advance the concern I had as the reason for the story, I either didn't use it, or discarded it. Side characters were therefore two dimensional, not fully formed, or even partially formed.

The Rainy Season, is a story of the butterfly effect. Everything matters. And so the story has given a new definition for what, for me, is a long story. From all, but one comment, you seem to be liking it. However, that may change! The story is far from completed. Each chapter runs between three thousand and thirty-five hundred words. I don't have an exact count, but we have crept up over 125,000 words. The story may be getting too damned long. I have a lot yet to cover. There are two active subplots at the moment, plus the tension between Lyla and Noime, plus Lyla's pregnancy... and that's just what is on the plate as we end chapter 40. I have also hinted at Laarni and that needs to be worked through. Like I say, there is a lot more story here. I hope you are all up for it.

21 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 39 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

20 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 38 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

18 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 37 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

17 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 36 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

16 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 35 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

15 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 34 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

13 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 33 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

At the request of a long time reader, I have added a left margin to all the chapters in this story. If enough of you think this is a significat improvement, I will consider adding it in to all the previous stories posted too.

12 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 32 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

11 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 31 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

10 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapters 29 AND 30 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

09 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 28 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

07 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapters 26 AND 27 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

This is the lingest story I have written and it has a ways to go. It is now well over 80,000 words. I little feed back on whether stories this long work for you, would be appreciated. This story has so many subplots that it is either already or will be soon in Novel length. (Depends on who's definition of length you use. The required presense of subplots is already well met.)

06 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 25 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

05 March 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I had previously posted Chapter 23 and have now posted Chapter 24 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

28 February 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 22 of The Rainy Season. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

24 February 2014
Current Work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 21 of The Rainy Season. I have decided to rework the 'tense'. As it is less disruptive to readers to work from the back end in such a change, Chapters 20 and 21 are now in present tense. As I go forward, I will update Chapter 19 next and so forth. I also made a small change in Chapter 20, as I had Lewis and Manny drinking beer before lunch time. That was an error and so now they are drinking coffee. Most of the past month has been spent, reworking the text on older stories. I think I am done with that task now.

02 February 2014
Distractions and currect activity

I am in the proccess of taking a break from The Rainy Reason, for a bit. I promise I will finish it. In the mean time, my desire to clean up the HTML in the older stories has taken on a life of its own. Following an initial removal of tags, I then cleaned up the headers and other unnecessary formatting and text in the files. Following that, I have been re-reading and re-editing the two first Jake in the Philippines stories, changing language, fixing awkward sentences, adding numerous hyperlinks. I will probably work through more of the older stories before returning to The Rainy Reason. The Old Man from Powder River is still in the wings. As much continues to be happening with the real life "Old Man," I am going to hold my fire and see where his life eventually takes him. So far it's a hoot.

26 January 2014
Current work: These Notes

I discovered that a huge section of these notes had been lost along with the comment form at the bottom. The earlier notes are lost, but the comment form as been returned to the bottom.

24 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

I have posted Chapter 20. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

20 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Now, almost a week after I posted Chapter 19, I have re-edited it after finding problems with some sentences. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got a few passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

14 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 19 is posted. No more for a few days. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

13 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 18 is posted. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

My removal of HTML code produced some messes that I have been cleaning up as I find them. If you find erroneous code or sections of Italics where there should not be Italics. Please note the chapter and story in a note to me.

8 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Based on one of my dedicated reader's comments, the type face on Retirement and The Rainy Season is now set to Times Roman. I have also stripped out all the extraneous HTML code from Retirement. A word of warning about this last thing. Some of the coding there was a real mess. If you find a problem in Retirement, please let me know ASAP. I am about to remove excess code from all my stories. The font will be Times Roman for All except Jake - Close to Home.

7 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

OK, chapter 17 is posted. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

6 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season / Read response

I got the following from someone who refused to give a name or valid return email address. I rarely get negative comments, but this one is clearly negative. I produce it here because, I guess, it pisses me off. I get that the guy doesn't like Italics for dialog. To that all I can say is, too bad. I make sure that if the conversation is more than one on one, I identify the speaker. When it is one on one, the dialog goes back and forth within the context and the speakers are clearly identifiable IMHO. As to the use of commas, Sorry, but I do use them and No, not every rule must be followed every time. When the speaker is being emphatic, a comma between No and Uncle mat give the wrong impression to the reader. So the absence of those commas were actually intentional. A point I would have made directly to this person if he had the balls to leave a valid email address. And lastly, this guy thinks I have not imbued any human emotion into my characters. This is a complaint that has never surfaced before in any of my writing and leaves me dumbfounded. Am I fooling myself? Does anyone who has read The Rainy Season not understood the emotions of Ann, Joy2x, Noime, Lewis... et al? Look, I appreciate all comments including negative ones. I have never posted a note here like this before. But if a reader is going to leave such a note, be a man and put your name and email address on it, or just don't post.

comments = VeryWellAged,

If I may, I'd like to make some suggestions. Regardless of how you deal with dialogue (and I will admit I am not a fan of how you use italics), it would help the reader if you occasionally added some identification to who's talking (like, Carolyn said, . . .). This would help keep track of who's saying what in the long tracts of dialogue.

If you have an editor, you need to talk to him/her. You're missing commas everywhere. In dialogue (as in all prose) when you call someone by name, a comma precedes their name (as in, "I want to talk to you, Paul"). You skip the comma when referring to someone in the third person ("I want to talk to Paul"). I know you understand this as you practice propper grammar part of the time and miss it the rest. That's why either you you should spend just a bit more time proofing before posting or talk to your editor.

One final note. Have you considered adding human emotions to your stories? I ask because your style is "put stick A into slot B" and ignore how anyone is feeling. Orgams and sex are more than just physical actions. Same with conversations. When people. Inverse they communicae 80% of their thoughts by non-verbal means (she leaned forward before saying . . ., his eyes opened wide in surprise and spoke . . ., she crossed her arms and frowned before replying . . ., etc.). Your stories would benefit from feelings and emotions being added. It would immerse the reader more.

Just some pointers.

4 January 2014
Editing: HTML issues

I have spent most of the day on an experiment. I have stripped every non-essential HTML code out of current story I am writing. From Prologue to the current chapter, (16), all tags, and styles that were not necessary, but stuck in by my word processor as I wrote the damned thing, were removed with the help of a text editor. The results are files of half the size. They seem to load faster and the results on the screen are more uniform. That solved a problem I was having with display changes that were not intentional and I was flummoxed by. I have chosen to display the story in Helvetica. However if you all want it in Courier or Times Roman, I should be able to make the complete changes very quickly as I only have to change one tag per chapter.

4 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 16 is posted. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

3 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapters 13, 14 and 15 are posted. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

2 January 2014
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapters 11 and 12 are posted. As usual, please let me know of errors in these as they only got two passes at the editing, which means I missed a lot!

30 December 2013
English version for Filipinos

I have a new Filipina proofreader/editor who is noting phrases not used by Filipino English speakers. I am sensitive about this issue and seek the guidance of my more dedicated readers. I have two options. To post along side the standard version, a version modified for Filipinos, or the change the basic version. The changes in many cases are truly minor, though to my eye and sense, they do have an impact on the text. Here are some samples of the types of changes that would be occurring.

change 'it actually got more interesting as the month wore on' to 'it actually got more interesting as the month went on'†
change 'I undid her bra' to 'I took off her bra'†
change 'I suggest that it be a very quick trip' to 'I suggest that it would need to be a very quick trip'†
change 'I can't fault you for that' to 'I can't blame you for that'

26 December 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season / Delay

The writing has gotten sidelined. I have been busy and unable to return to the work. Hopefully this will change after the first of the new year. For all of you of the Christian faith, I hope you have all had a wonderful Christmas.

21 November 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 10 is posted. There may still be errors in it.

19 November 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 10 is written and currently being edited in rewrite/draft. Chapter 11 is started and should be completed soon if it continues to flow well, and if I don't get a lot of distractions. So I will have at least one chapter to post by the weekend and maybe two.

14 November 2013
Current work & and life in the Philippines:

First, for all of you who have sent messages of concern, we are fine. Thank you for your concern. The Typhoon, which by many accounts, was the worst on record, we are OK and safe. Though the news reports throughout the the world never mention it... The Philippines is a country of over 7000+ islands. Tacloban, (tac-LOW-ban) sitting in the middle and Samar, (sah-MAR), right next to it, got just about wiped off the map, but other areas were not as hard hit.

The earthquake centered in Bohol, (bo-HOL) and then the Typhoon, called Yolanda here, not Haiyan - a Japanese name, neither of which directly affected us, has never the less been a huge distraction. Chapter 10 sits unfinished, but mostly done. I have my dance card heavily subscribed, but hope to break some time out to finish.

On a separate matter I had the request of a Filipina, in Makati, (Manila,) to send her some of the stories in PDF format as her WiFi is crappy and she can't stay on line reliably enough to read them. Is there any reason for me to post the stories as PDF's? Comments?

31 October 2013: Halloween
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapters 8 and 9 are posted. Chapter 10 is in progress. This is a story with a singular POV and that viewer, our narrator does not have a view of a huge amount of the action around him. He is reacting as we all do to the sliver of reality he sees. He frequently does not understand the motivations of others, or they are hidden or partially hidden from him. We see that more and more as the story progresses and he is less and less in control of the actions of others. You see only what he sees. Frustrating, isn't it?

28 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 8 is complete but not posted. I have decided to complete Chapter 9 and maybe Chapter 10 before I post any more. I won't go into the technical reasons I am doing this for now. But once you read Chapter 8, you will want Chapter immediately. That much I am pretty sure is accurate. You have been reading an expanded version of the short story I originally wrote. What is happening now is a transition/bridge to where the story needs to go in the long form. You have been introduced to all the 'change players.' Two (or three) only tangentially. All will take on tasks as we go forward and take us new places.

25 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 7 is posted but the next chapter has to wait until next week. I am posting with fewer re-edits due to some imploring from you folk, to not wait too long. So once again, please report all errors, be they spelling, contextual or continuity issues.

24 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Those of you who implored me to make The Rainy Season a long form piece had better have meant it. I am having to spend a lot of time on the dynamics of complex feelings and concerns. That is not sexy stuff but it is required on longer pieces. Chapter 7 is going to start out hot but cool off quickly as inherent problems must be brought forward and dealt with. How they get resolved is the matter of the chapter. I am working on it now but it is a difficult part to write. I am not sure when it will be ready.

22 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

I have re-edited and re-posted the first five chapters upon finding numerous errors that required attention. I expect to post Chapter 6 by sometime this weekend. My thanks to those who sent in corrections!

Thanks to all those who sent in words of praise for this story. I can't say I have ever had a better first response to anything I have posted. To the fellow who wanted some action with a pregnant female, I can't promise that here, but there is some of that in Retirement and Jake - Joyfully. To the gentlemen who wanted to know what others were saying in their comments to me, I will exercise discretion and generally refrain from a roll call of requests and comments here.

20 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Chapter 5 is now posted. There are many more to come. I have had only one response to the first four chapters and no comment about any errors.I'm sure I will hear about those soon.

I am having problem with the jumps as the site is behaving weirdly. Sometimes putting a chapter file in "www." and sometimes in "www1." I have no clue if what I have done will hold. It is working now... hard to say what happens by tomorrow.

18 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

OK, I have uploaded the Index, Prologue and Chapter's 1 through 4. They do contain errors. When you find them, send me a note please. I have the jumps working and have given the story so far three edits, but things are so hectic here that I keep on getting interrupted and losing my flow in the editing process.

12 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

I have made very good progress on The Rainy Season. The first draft of the first five chapters are completely done. Chapter Six is well under way. I am considering turning back to the first four chapters and starting the editing and multiple draft process. After that posting one chapter at a time as each one goes through that process. I think it will take the first four chapters to establish the story.

10 October 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

Based on unanimous requests The Rainy Season is now being worked into a long form story. I find that I needed to go back and add things in between language that already was "complete." So while, I think, the first two chapters are done, what was Chapter three will likely become Chapter four or five. A sub-plot I had slipped in as a minor piece before will now be fleshed out.

25 September 2013
Current work: The Rainy Season

I am finally back to work in a serious way on The Rainy Season. I am not sure if this should be a short story or a longer tale. It can go either way. If I wrap it up in under 10,000 words, I have most of the first draft done. If it is a 30K to 50K word piece... well I have the core material down necessary to take it all the way out there. I could probably start posting a longer piece in sections starting with the first three or four chapters in a couple of weeks. I am not sure. My sense is that there is a lot here if I want to work with it. Here's part of the deal. Short pieces typically (but not always) have more sex as a percentage of the total word count. The longer pieces have more plot and character development. There is still sex there, but so that it is not a wall to wall catalog of sex acts, there has to be more story. Which do you folks prefer based on my previous writings?

18 September 2013
Re-Edit/rework of Aft Gang Agley:

Reading through this story again, I decided the end section was abrupt, poorly written and while not truly out of logical timing, it seemed that was except on a very close read. So I added some paragraphs and made it work a little smoother. Not a major re-write, but more than a tweak.

Things continue to be too busy for me to complete the new stories, and in truth I am still awaiting events to write even the middle parts. Ugh. I think I was far too optimistic on the projects. On top of that there is too much material from which to draw. It's a bit distracting.

Question: What would a woman, with children, be willing to do, to get her family well and safely away from Zamboanga City. Away from the violence there between the MNLF and the armed forces of the Philippine government? What would her life be like in a city in flames? Her squatter's huts burnt to ciders? Rebels taking hundreds of hostages and using those hostages as human shields? Husband gone or dead, or maybe no husband, what would she do, to find salvation?

02 September 2013
Fishing

I always enjoys your feedback. But that said, increasingly I have been getting emails from individuals who for honest or less than honest reasons seem to want to suss out who and where I am. As I have no interest in police interrogations in any country, and as these stories seem to be too close to the bone for some, I make it a strict policy to avoid any disclosure of my true identity or whereabouts. In the last three weeks I have had four 'individuals' who each in one way or another tried to draw me out. It isn't going to happen.

25 August 2013
Current Work

Things have been hectic here. I have only recently gotten back to the two stories I mentioned recently. Right now I am working on The Rainy Season. I don't think it will be ready for a second draft until the end of next month. I am finding it hard to bounce between two stories. So I think I will complete the The Rainy Season first before moving back to The Old Man from Powder River. The first of the two is more a sexual adventure and the second a true romance of an odd type. On another matter, I have recently had three offers from older duffers, like me, to act as editors. All three guys seem nice and genuine. My previous experience with guys of my age is that we tend to miss the same things. I have been having some success working without a net, so to speak, recently. So I think I might hold off for my dream editor, a female who likes cock and pussy. No I don't want to fuck my editor, but I do want an editor who might have eyes for things I am getting wrong in a way guys generally cannot. I have trolled for female editors before without luck and suspect I will not find any now, but what the heck. It's worth trying to find one, one more time.

18 August 2013
The Girls - Tong-its

A question that no one has ever asked is 'how do the women spend their time when they are not fucking, sucking, cleaning, eating, cooking, shopping, gossiping or conspiring?' The answer is a card game called Tong-its. It's a betting game and they play it for hours. Of course they love to gossip, shop and conspire, so the time is spread out between these activities. Plus, if for some reason they are alone - which is rare, these days they like to play Facebook games. There are plenty examples of their conspiring in my stories so I don't think that requires any further explanation. In fact there are times I feel like I live in a need to know environment in which no one thinks I need to know!

17 August 2013
Filipino pronunciation and language in the Philippines

I have covered much of this scattered around the stories, but I have not consolidated it anywhere. All Philippine languages and certainly the main one, Tagolog, also called Filipino, stress the second or third syllable, not the first. The 'G' sound is always hard. If they mean J they spell J. The Tagalog vowel sounds are soft as in 'ah, eh, ih, oh, ooh.' If you see an 'ay' at the end of a word, it is pronounced as a hard 'I' as in the English 'Die' or 'My'. Putting those rules together Boracay is pronounced as bo-RAH-kI. Putting the rules together also makes Ganda sound out as ghan-DAH. For what is worth ganda means beautiful or lovely in Tagalog. To tell your girl she is very beautiful, say, 'maganda ka!.' However given names, instead of nicknames, can and do break this rule at times. If you see a name with a 2X, it means repeat! Ging2X becomes ghing-ghing. English in Tagalog occurs and the result can be surprising. You can go to the Pulis station and you can watch Aksyon News. Your girlfriend may be seksi so a simple way to tell her she is sexy is to write 'seksi ka' in your IM. When in the Philippines, you might go to eat at the Chicken Hauz. You will get texts that start, Gud day, or end, Gud evening. Sentences that are mostly in Tagalog will be interspersed with true English. Many in the upper class speak English primarily and Tagalog only when talking with the help and trade people. Those who have to cope with an English only speaker often say they are getting a 'nose bleed.' Filipino's at times have problems with possessives. You might hear, 'The house of Jake,' instead of 'Jake's House.' There are other oddities such as 'I can't breath,' instead of 'I can't breathe;' Or 'whit bread' for 'wheat bread.' If you don't set the rules very early in your relationship with a girl, she will have a fit if she looks at your cell and finds you have a female 'chatmate.' Such discoveries can cause the end of a relationship.

17 August 2013
Stories reposted

I have been modifying the meta data in the HTML files. A small note was added to chapter 1 of Ganda. I may need to do a second meta data edit later. We will see.

30 July 2013
Current work - not yet posted

I am working on two stories that are currently both in the initial drafts and not nearly ready for posting. The first to post may be, The Old Man from Powder River. The other story has the working title The Rainy Season. I expect to be able to start posting by the end of August.

25 April 2013
Hiatus and a peeve about SOL

††††††††††††† I am on a prolonged hiatus from my writing. I may tweak a story from time to time, if I think a word is wrong, or a sentence needs rework, but there will be no new tales for a few months now. I will continue to answer emails. I am watching the US Immigration law activity in the US Congress. It has the potential for making for some very different stories, because it carries the potential for a different reality. If unskilled / low skilled workers will be able to get work visaís then importing multiple mistresses becomes possible.. under a guise of low wage employment.

††††††††††††† Some of my stories continue to be posted on Storiesonline.net. There, the site gives stories scores supposedly based on user votingÖ But it isnít, because the scores are manipulated to satisfy other needs the site administrator needs to remedy. My criticism is that the manipulated scores get posted to the potential reader as the true scores for the work. In the past the site admin would allow the authors to see the raw scores before manipulation, but no more. Now we just get less helpful bar graphs, but even those shows how wrong the scores are that the reader sees. As the scores drive what people read on that site, I guess it irritates me. Better that there should be no score posted, than post a manipulated score. Hereís are three examples. In each the posted score is listed. Clearly, my readers think more of these stories than the score reflects. If my readers did not like my stories, it would be on my back. I either need to write better stories or accept that I canít. But displaying manipulated scores is just wrong. Readers do not see the graphs. The graphs are for the authors ONLY.
Graph for Joyfully Graph for CloseToHome
Graph for FromNothing

1 April 2013
Current Work COMPLETED: Retirement

††††††††††††† The final chapter of Retirement has been posted.

31 March 2013
Current Work : Retirement

††††††††††††† I have completed the first draft of the final chapter of Retirement. It still needs to go through a rigorous editing and proofing. I have no new project in the works presently, though I have a few ideas I am toying with writing. We will see.

21 March 2013
Rework during Hiatus: Trifecta

††††††††††††† I re-read Trifecta and decided it needed some changes. I added a few paragraphs, a few other sentences in other places, changed the tense in a couple of places. I added a footnote. However the arc of the story remains unchanged.

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