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Hi, I've been a fan of the Mind
Control Archive and your site for some time.
I thought I'd make a contribution to your Favorite MC movies page by recommending
"Body of Influence', a great soft porn/cable movie that came out in '92
with Shannon Whirry. The unrated version has some good sex scenes
but the best part of the movie is the mind play between the doctor and
patient. C, 30 Sep 03
"Hi, I recently discovered your site and
I'm very impressed by your writing. I've become an instant fan.
I particulary enjoyed your Charmed One Trilogy.
It's one of the best stories I've read. You don't see too many stories
about the Charmed Ones around, and the few I've seen, asides from yours,
aren't very good. Will there be anymore Charmed Ones stories coming
from either you or Trent Wolf?" Jury, 23 Sep
"JR Parz, I love 'Witchcraft
For Hire' and I cannot wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the great work". Derek, 17 Sep
After complimenting Andrew Mellon on his story,
"Sweet Home Alabama", which is definitely a favorite and will probably
end up on my Hall of Fame page, he responded with this...
JR, Thanks a lot, I am really glad you liked it. That is quite an
honor. Now that the Hall of Fame is being offered the pressure is
really on for a hot part 2. Thanks for your wisdom. I
checked out your page for inspiration and I think I finally have something
strung together, now I just have to get it together. Thanks for all
your good work on the subject. And your biliography of mc literature
is fantastic. I can't wait to check out some of your reads. Andrew
Mellon, Writer, 15 Sep 2003
After writing Born Blitzed about wanting to
add his story, "Spellbound" to my Hall of Fame page, he responded with
this... (. . . written after picking
myself up off the floor . . .) Wow! Let's see . . . I'm an
aspiring country musician, waiting for my first big break, and Garth Brooks
himself calls me up to say he's listened to my demo, and would like me
to open for him on his next 15-city tour. . . . Let me think abou--YES!
I have been a *huge* fan of yours since first finding the EMCSA five years
ago; and I still have your homepage bookmarked in my Favorites folder.
I am honored that you've found one of my stories as enjoyable to read as
I did to write, and I gladly give permission for you to add it to your
Hall of Fame."
Born Blitzed, Writer, 15 Sep 2003
JR, Do you know that old belief that the prettiest
girl in school never has a date because everyone assumes she already has
one? I didn't want that to happen with your story, "Witchcraft
for Hire." I assume that it is getting
lots of praise from readers. You are a highly respected author in
the community, you never let your readers down. The story is quite original;
I don't remember ever reading a story about a spell-caster renting out
their services. The sex and imagery are incredibly hot! I personally love
the scenes involving Jessica the nubile teenager. Anyway, I do indeed hope
you are getting the appropriate accolades for your most recent story, as
they are deserved. Take it easy - Bank, 11
Very interesting story (Leftovers,
a Master PC tale) as are all of your stories.
It's interesting that your main character found a way around his morality,
since he's not a complete asshole. Too bad the 'Master PC' isn't
real because i sure could use it. Thank You! "unanomous,
8 Sep 2003
Hi, my name is Meachy. I just wanted
to do my part in letting you know both your
stuff on the Bearchive and EMCSA is really cool.
Not to mention your movie site too. I've been reading your stuff
since way back in '98. I think I've seen all that you've posted online
and also all the stories that were spawned from you influences. Anyway,
I wanted to stop to take out some time to give you a way overdue pat on
the back. No request, no fanboy ranting, and hopefully no annoying
repeating.... Just a lil praise and a fan wishing you well.
Meachy, 3 Sep 2003
of the Best" was one of the best stories I've
read in a long time and I'd love to see more. Thank you for sharing it
with us. Great job! :)
FMancuso, 30 Aug 2003
"I like this story (Best
of the Best). It's my own life long
wish to be a female slave so I could feel the pleashure of heather under
the skin. Congratulation!" Sandra, 28
I must say you have written another great
story. "Witchcraft For Hire"
is great, and I can't wait for your next installment. I've always been
impressed with your writing, but sometimes you go beyond my expectations.
Don't leave us in suspense for to long about the next chapter. Again great
story I'm eagerly awaiting the next one." Lynxx,
22 August 2003
Ah now this was just delicious (Witchcraft
For Hire, Part One). A bit hard to follow
at the beginning, but fun once it got rolling. I love the dialogue between
the two guys at the end." Cmdr Mark,
20 Aug 2003
I read "Leftover"
- good, ole-fashioned erotic MC fiction! It turned me on. Now,
I read Witchcraft for Hire.
Erotic, stimulating story. But I am going to give you some constuctive
criticism so gird yer loins. You treated the girls a little bit like
fuckdolls. This is one of the least female POV stories I have read
by you - if you were to go back and re-read your excellent tips for other
writers it might jog you a bit. Even though the story was technically female
POV, it "felt" like a male POV. More "and she sucked her" and less
"the idea of crouching down was repugnant but she found it strangely arousing"
kind of stuff. You got into the blonde girl's head (the fiesty one)
for a little bit, gave us a taste of her, but not much. I am not
saying it ignored feelings and attitudes - I think it could have used a
little more to lift it from good to excellent. Now, "Athena's
G-Spot" is prolly your best story (IMO).
Read this: "Her mind drifting back to a time in college when she
and her girlfriend partied with two boys they had just met. They'd
done a lot of drinking and before she realized what was going on, the four
of them were naked on a bed. One touch led to another and the next thing
she knew her 'supposed-to-be' heterosexual girlfriend was kissing a trail
down her body. She remembered feeling petrified as her girlfriend continued
down to her pussy and just before her girlfriend could tongue her, one
of the guys pushed her away and and took over the position between her
legs. Yeah, she had been embarrassed that she was being fucked with an
audience, but it would have been much worse if her girlfriend had gone
down on her. Every now and then she would look back at this mini-orgy
and feel all grossed out, so why now did the thought of Bambi make her
feel... 'wet'?" That kind of character development pays off BIGTIME
when she falls in love with Bambi, really has a new and profound attitude.
Anyway, keep on witing. Your stories are like pizza and sex.
Even when they aren't great they are still pretty damn good :) Phred
Pharkas, 18 Aug 2003
"I'm SO glad to see you delving into the Master
PC world again (Leftovers, a Master PC Tale).
Your work easily outshines any of the authors who have contributed to this
universe. Keep up the good work! Thanks for the years of GREAT
erotica- Dan P, Nashville,TN,USA, 17
I don't know if I've emailed you before or
not but I've really enjoyed several of your
stories. I read alot more stories from
the site than I enjoy and enjoy many many more stories than I feel like
writing to the author about. Your latest, "Leftovers,
A Master PC Tale", however, was incredible!
I felt myself 'strangely compelled' to let you know. The combination of
dramatic irony and whatever the opposite of that is made the story not
only extremely erotic but actually an interesting story that'd be worth
reading even when someone wasn't horny -though they would be soon after
starting to read. Terpsman, 16 Aug 2003
Sir…I just wanted to say…you are a seriously
talented person. You seem to know all the right things to write.
stories ROCK. Thanks for writing!
Keep up the good work! Zak, 14 Aug 2003
Hello, I was recently sent some of your NC-17
Fanfiction (The Charmed Ones Trilogy)
by a friend who thought I might wish to archive them in my Charmed Archive
(the Hollow). I would love to add them to the site. However before
I add any fiction I want to make sure that I have permission to add it
to the site. Please take a look at the Hollow if you'd like and let me
know if you'd like your fiction added to the listing. So far our adult
section is fairly small but we're hoping to expand! :o) Jaguar,
14 Aug 2003
I got a third of the way through this story
(Best of the Best),
just after the transfer... and decided that I knew what was going to happen...
Boring, predictable, tedious and sexist in the extreme... For one
thing it seemed pretty obvious that the 'Father' was the developer of this
'collar', and the irony of loosing his precious 'princess' to the people
he allowed to exploit it was actually poetic justice... If all you
wanted to do was subdugate the 'agent' it would have held more resonance
if he had been converted from the male by surgery, as it was, the moment
you revealed the 'augmentation' and the 'play'of the other agents it was
obvious. Sorry - U Must Try harder and pay more attention to characterisation."
13 Aug 2003
JR., you've got a talent for writing this
stuff (Best of the Best),
but you gotta work on the endings. Either that, or do as you seem to hint,
and write a sequel with a better ending. The attitudes of some of the people
in this story are just too unreal to be believed. And, no, I don't give
a rat's ass if the bad guys "win" sometimes in real life. I just don't
like seeing it end that way in a story. And the front part of this story,
which was mostly the dialogue between Chris and Danvers was WAYYYY too
long, and reminds me of some of the more boring dialogues and philosophical
discussions in stories written by Robert Heinlein. Man, if there was ever
an author who needed an editor, it was that man. Anyway, better luck with
the next story. Paula, 12 Aug 2003
I just wanted to add that if this guy was the
best secret agent in the world (Best of the
Best), the secret agent field must be severly
lacking in good agents. This guy was incredibly gullible and far
more helpless than anyone with the reputation "best of the best" could
ever be. Also, I felt the story was too short, and that the villain
shouldn´t win. p.s. if this had been James Bond, he´d
never consent to this patching, and probably never even go for the mission
in that way, for any amount of money. anonymous,
12 Aug 2003
"Thoughts on a sequel to "Leftovers"?
Or do you have anything else in mind for future stories (Master
PC or otherwise)? Look! I'm trying to
start a conversation with one of the greatest authors on the net!" Cdmr,
11 Aug 2003
Hi, I like your Master
PC Stories and The Universe as well.
I have read Most of the Stories and they are very good for the most part.
But your Last Story: "Leftovers" creates some new wrinkles that need to
be addressed. You addressed about the Owner Of the Computer
Dieing But what about the Following Questions? Question: What
happens when the Computer and/or Hard Drive that Master PC is on Craters
or is destroyed, or if the Hard Drive is wiped out and/or overwritten,
or if the Program itself is Deleted? Do ALL the changes revert
to Pre-Master PC settings? Are the Changes Permanente? If they
are Permanente, what about Password Locks on a Subjects Settings?
Are they Permanently Locked Up or are the Locks broken and the Settings
freed and available to be changed by another Copy of Master PC? Question:
What happens if the computer is turned off? Must Master PC be running
all the time to ensure the Changes, Safeguards and/or Lock outs stay in
place? The Main Question is Does the Computer CONTROL the Changes
( i.e. the 100 Km/Mile Radius) or is it merely the Local Node for a Larger
Device?" Regards, CloseShaveHer, 11
Greetings, according to one of your fellow
authors of the Master PC
series, you are the author that started it all and I was wondering what
gave you the idea to make a story like Master
PC. Did something give you inspiration
or was it something that came to you right out of the blue? Sincerely,
11 Aug 2003
"Best of the Best"
had several tense problems which distracted from the reading but overall
an interesting read. I think it ended too abruptly as well. I had
no idea who is in his former body now. I wonder if someone controls
the father? Also, with the amount of control the daughter has over
the agent turned girl, couldn't she request her to, say, deliver him a
sharp knife into his heart. She might not be able to do it herself, but
with her own slave, well, girls have killed parents for less cause!
Here's an idea, maybe pms throws off control enough for her to escape somehow.
There is more you can do with this story so do it already :) Thanks
for donating it to FM!" anonymous, 11 Aug
I loved this story (Best
of the Best), a good mix of co-ertion and
subtle control. If such a collar did exist I sure would like one,
now who could I get to Key me into a Submissive!!!" Lynkat,
11 Aug 2003
"Best of the
Best was somewhat entertaining, but definately
not the kind of world I would want to be a part of. The bad guys
getting their way is a far cry from justice, which to me is essential in
any story". Kellie, 11 August 2003
Best of the Best
had a most interesting plot, well done there... What a horrible society
one should think there has to a underground resistance group fighting something
so extremely disgusting, the device is something one should have expected
from North Korea or Sadam, its pure evil. Are you going to let the
bad guys get away with this? Or are you building something?
I do hope you build on this story, it could get really interesting". Deluded,
11 Aug 2003
In the Best
of the Best story, the underlying mysoginy
of the concept behind the collars is more than a little distateful". Franqui,
11 Aug 2003
Review of "Best
of the Best"... I would have liked to
see friends of his get revenge and rescue him...after all, the profession
he is in does not like double crosses and has the "resources" to make sure
that the scumbags don't do it more than once". Budget
blonde, 11 Aug 2003
"While the "being blackmailed and forced
into willing slavery" angle reminded me of why Farleven's Mind Control
stories can be so fun, I think this story (Best
of the Best) could have been a lot better.
The two most glaring problems were that the story should have been much
longer and more detailed than it was, and that the basic set-up was silly.
Still worth reading, though". Scalper16, 11
"Come on, this is mean. You cannot let
"Best of the Best"
end this way. Please do something" Jennifer,
11 Aug 2003
"Just finsihed reading "master
pc - leftovers" good story, great twist with
the basic story line. I think you could have expanded on the sex
scenes a bit (i.e. including the middle part of the sex). Well done
on getting all those woman into Dan's condo without him making a single
command, expertly done. Can't wait for the next part, maybe Heather
will transform Jennifer and Sheri into something similar to herself? -
p.s. I noticed a few typo's and the odd gramma mistake. Just thought
I should let you know". Benji Dude, 11 August
"A nice new tale (Master
PC - Leftovers). For a while there I thought
maybe Cash had become his cousin in order to hide from something, and had
done it so thoroughly that not even he remembered having been anyone other
than "Danny" but the story makes more sense this way. Well done.
The only thing I can say I'd like to have seen is Heather make Jennifer's
boobs bigger", Cdmr, 11 August 2003
JRParz - Welcome back! It was great to
see a new facet to the Master PC Universe
from you, the creator of it all! I've silently kept up with you work
and website for a while now... I was very pleased to see your re-write
on the original Master PC,
was a wonderful addition. Without a doubt my favorite series/universe.
Thanks for a great read!" Fizz, 11 August 2003
"I have re-read a bunch of your stories on
the EMCSA that appear to be re-posts (did you take them off at one point,
and then decide to put them back?) and really enjoyed them. Just
good erotic fiction, especially the Athena's
G-Spot story. I like the way she truly
has a complete attitude change, and enjoys the change. Great stories",
Pharkas, writer, 11 August 2003
"thank you for the story (Master
PC - Leftovers), and i hope to read more soon.
I gave this story a vote of: 10", Anonymous,
11 Aug 2003
hi, good story (Master
PC - Leftovers), but wonder if he could use
the program to give him the passwords,after all it can make someone have
any skills wanted,and the computer has the passwords imbeded in the progam,
and I am sure he did not have the copmuter protect itself - just a thought".
9 Aug 2003
Mr. Parz- First, I'd like to say what a
fantastic job you've done on the revision of your original Master
PC story. This is the story that inspired
me to begin writing erotica, so it's great to see revisions being done.
I submitted one story based on that titled Sensual Redemption".
Regards, One Lonely Bastard, 8 Aug 2003
"JR, A GREAT story (Master
PC - Leftovers)! Danny may not be 'using'
the MasterPC program,
but he certainly is having fun enjoying
the benefits of it." jdw, 8 Aug 2003
"Great stories and thanks for creating
a world (Master PC Universe)
that all can enjoy keep up the good work". Magnus,
7 Aug 2003
"Outstanding story (Master
PC). I had always wondered how and where
the trend started. Thank you for a good story". Karen,
5 Aug 2003
JR, I had no idea you were the original writer
of the Master PC
stories! Well done. Honestly, I've thought of variations of
that story for years, and I think I may still do one. My concept
was originally a computer that actually could control someone who's had
something implanted into their head, so it's a little bit different. I've
also seen a few stories already written with that concept that I have...
Even so, you did a great job. I love the story.. it's very hot and exactly
the type of MC I like. Ya even make the incest stuff look pretty hot..
LOL. I found myself re-reading the entire set you have there and
it's deliciously creative. Thanks for the great story. Chase,
Writer, 5 Aug 2003
sir, i just read your storie (master
pc) and love it. kim,
5 Aug 2003
Really enjoyed the new story (Best
of the Best). The plot makes no sense...
in the fact that the billionaire knew who had his daughter and where they
were and only after he'd tried and failed to send in two agents did he
think to try contacting them and buying them off. And the threat of what
a pissed off billionaire could do to them would have been an important
element of persuading them to agree. And what sort of 'Best of the
Best' agent doesn't go over the plan *before* the mind transplant?
But as I say, the McGuffin in CASABLANCA (the supposedly unreversable set
of orders plot) doesn't work either... Also, I really loved the line:
"Spoken like a true Republican!" (You're going to get a lot of angry
and humourless people writing to you if your readers represent a cross
section of the American public...) Best wishes, Boris
Ludmenkov, 4 Aug 2003
"Great re-write of Master
PC. Really liked it... Couple
of criticisms though. 1) At the Beach you had Wendy Giggling, shouldn't
it be Heather? (too many characters, too much confusion) 2) you used
Peak instead of Peek (...peaked into her mind....) Otherwise, I really
enjoyed it". Anonymous, 4 Aug 2003
Hi JR, I just thought I'd drop you a few lines
and tell you that I really enjoyed your latest story (Best
of the Best). I'm not that big an MC fan but
I very much enjoyed the TG elements involved. I guess I'm just a romantic
but I'd sure would have enjoyed it better if Chris had zapped both Nick
and Danther's without being 'keyed'. Oh well such is life. LOL In any case
thanks for adding another fine TG story to your growing collection! I really
enjoy your writing!" Nora, 2 Aug 2003
HI JRParz. I don't think you'll remember
me. I'm StarLord, from Spain. We met a couple of years ago in an Erotic
Hypnosis Mailing List (EHML) I managed. If you don't remember me, don't
worry :) I've been following your web site, specially your favourite
MC movies. Well, just wanted to let you know how much I like your
web site, your stories, and the great job collecting movies and novels
that have hypnosis and mind control stuff :) Thanks to you, I got
several good movies that have mind control/hypnosis. Thanks, again,
for your great job ;) StarLord, 29 July
"Great story, Athena's
G-Spot, JR. I love seriel recruitment.
Very nicely told". Vendatrix, 28 July
Greetings, Love your work.
Especially "Sabrina and Tabitha - Teenage
Witches". I run a f/f site and would
like to use it. With your permission, of course. Let me know
what you think. Sincerely, Mikey. 23
After praising Phred Pharkas for his story,
"Other People's Property", he responded with... "High praise indeed
from a writer of your stature - I have read all of yours of course. "Beach
Babes" and "To
Serve and Pleasure" are my favorites.
What is it you dig about this story? It seems to have provoked strong
reactions from a bunch of people, yet I personally am not to into it (a
submissive woman asked me to write it for her - it is not really my fantasy).
Thnaks again for your praise. :) Phred
Pharkas, writer, 13 July 2003
"Are you planning on updating the Master
PC universe soon? I notice it's been
almost 2 months since the last update, and that's a shame, since I've come
to rely on your page for the latest in worthwhile MasterPC stories.
Is it because you haven't had the time to update? or is there just nothing
new and good being released to the net lately?" nuvan,
10 July 2003.
"I am a big fan of your work and you actually
are the first mind control site that I found after I read, "The Book" so
to say the least you are a big contributer to my mind control fantisies.
I have been searching for a story for a very long time that dealt with
a man who hypnotized a woman (his neighbor?) and age regressed her while
her husband was at work? It's been a while since I read it so my
memory is foggy. Can you by any chance tell me what that story was
or tell me who might could help? I have tried using search engines
and I can't locate it... thanks!" Cory,
8 July 2003
Hello, I just read a story of yours
again called "Unholy Desire"
and wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed it and found it to be
one of your better stories. I wanted to ask and maybe suggest that
you add to the story. To me, it feels unfinished. Here is what
I would think would happen next. Maria, having been turned into a nymphomaniac
and always needing to be satisfied by other women, learns to enjoy the
control she has over other women. She starts to embrace a life as
a dominatrix, submissive only to Jason who uses his magic to make her lust
for him. Now, she goes out dressed in tight leather, looking for
innocent young girls to "tame" to become her slave and maybe Jason's.
Also, Jason decides to acquire Katrina and when he does, Jessica
is devastated. She wants Katrina to fight his will so they can be
together, Katrina tells her that they can only be together if she gives
into Jason as well. Jessica is so obsessed with being with Katrina
she gives in and Jason turns her into a submissive sex slave with huge
tits. She suddenly can't understand why she had ever resisted Jason.
Oh yeah, and what happened with Katrina's roommate and lover? Jason
made her submissive, but shouldn't she join Jason's little harem as well?
These are just my thoughts. Keep up the writing. I look forward to
your next story". Maedemons, 30 June
Hey, I am a big "Charmed" fan and love 'The
Charmed Ones Triligy' u wrote, but u might
want to add more screams and stuff like 'oh my god'; ' yes, fuck me hard';
'cum in me' and stuff like that most readers like that. try making a story
with buffy willow and the charmed girls, Cameron,
29 June 2003
Dear Webmaster, I've recently found
your page and found it extremely enjoyable and entertaining. Fentuen,
28 June 2003
JR, I have kind of an interesting story
for you, if you don't mind. Last July, I ran an Internet search on "erotic
stories." I was bored at home, and I wanted to see what I found. I ended
up at a site by a guy named Fitz that just so happened to have a story
about a stepfather that hypnotizes his stepdaughter and wife. I had discovered
mind control erotica! I was like a Mayan seeing Spanish soldiers
on horse for the first time. My world was turned upside down, to be cliched
about it. Anyway, I was ravenous that day. I ran another search: "mind
control erotica" or something along those lines. I came upon your site,
and read "The Agency."
I felt drunk and loopy. I read the "Twins
Enslaved - Amber's tale". I was totally drunk
with this new world. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know that it
was your stories that indoctrinated me fully into my love of MC erotica.
I have been as involved as I can be, considering I haven't written a story
yet. Well, I appreciate you listening to my ramblings. Congratulations
on your script. I would like to say that I am a great fan of yours
and of all of your guidelines (lesbian conversion, innocent young ladies
being seduced.) Thanks for no city-sized harems or bitchy female executives.
Ugh! Take care - Oz, 13 June 2003
and "Sorcerer's Curse"
are both fun stories which I enjoyed reading. I love the concepts
and situations you describe. The utter chaos that eventually develops.
These sorts of things can inspire me. Thanks. =) Joe,
17 May 2003
hi... guess you don't know me...
have just been forwarded a story of yours by my friend... the title...
sensations"... it's wonderful to put
it mildly... my compliments to you... hope you follow up with
more such stories... regards, soft_devil,
9 May 2003
"Good afternoon, I love your stories and the
PC World. I read your guidelines and
have been considering writing a story ...I have a few concerns and obviously
I'd like your blessing. My story starts off... there will be
a number of plot twists and the only thing in the story that won't be completely
realistic is the existance of the master pc program... Please advise
me... I envision it being novel length before im done and the
ending is one of the biggest shock that you can imagine. I'll let
you in on it cause you would play a role in the final chapter :) Jay,
19 Apr 2003
i loved ur story of "horney
little valentine" wow - sexy woman, do u have
any more? joanne, 12 apr 2003
I bought most of the Russ Martin books that
you described on your site and was pleased with them. Thanks for
the recommendation. I also rented "Huntress: Spirit of the Night",
and once again, very cool. So basically I trust your opinion on this
one. BTW, this isn't the first time I emailed you, most other times
it's been about tales you've penned (or should I say keyed). Thanks
for the opinion in advance!" JM (aka
I was wondering how you decided upon the full
name of Jill Fox for the story, "Double Your
Pleasure" with the genie in it... I knew a
girl with that name, did / do you? Just curious; good story. Jill,
11 Apr 2003
I still write and I am very happy to still
see my story up in your Hall Of Fame... I still read a lot of mc
stories and I went to your page for the first time in years the other day.
I saw the good news about your deal for your screenplay and I just wanted
to say congratulations from one writer to the other. I always wanted
to try something like that (I have a great idea for a vampire soap opera
thing in my head)... Congratulations again, I've always thought you
were a fantastic writer (Cassandra Vampiress
is a classic) and I'm glad to see some cream has risen to the top. Ken
(aka KMB the author of Bloodlust), 6 April 2003
I don't know if you have read the Master
PC series by Xanthos Pendragon but I have
to say that I find myself relating to him in his story... I only
wish that Master PC was real... I just thought you might understand my
wish to change things because of your writing. Well, I will let you
go but I have enjoyed your stories and look forward to more. Thanks, Jeff,
3 April 2003
JR, The stuff that you write is really
great. Very good. Thanks, Matthew,27
"I wanted to say that I love your site
and your work. You have a skill", Orlok,
24 Mar 03
Hello, First thing. I love every one,
and every bits of your stories. As you can probably tell, my favorite
is Master PC.
Today, i wrote one too. Since i'm a french canadian, i'm not really
good in english and I would be thankful if you could give me your opinion,
tell me errors i've made (about the Master PC universe or paradoxial things
in the story), and where i could find someone to correct spelling mistakes.
It's the first draft, but almost completed. Thanks a lot, WeirdoBC,
22 Mar 03
Hello jr, well just add my name to the list
of being totally turned on and enjoying it. Well written, flowing storyline.
I am glad you didn't stop with just the first story. The way you mention
the decor, and the other women makes me think another story could be forthcoming.
Or is that just wishful thinking on my part? Marline,
15 Mar 03 (I'm
not sure what story this fan is referring too - but I'm guessing Young
great story (Master
PC) man, keep up the good work and i look
forward to reading more of your work. Benji
Dude, 15 Mar 03
hi, i've been to your website and i have to
say that your stories are so far the best
that i have ever read. they're really
nicely written and very well detailed. i just wanted to say that your stories
are great and i've really enjoyed reading them. i look forward to
reading your future stories. oh, by the way, do you happen to know
some other free sites that have great stories like yours? i'm just
wondering if maybe you could give suggest some great sites coz a lot of
the other sites i've been through were not that great compared to yours.
28 Feb 03
I found your story "Young
Sorceress" at this site without attribution,
although on the main page, they do say "Copyright to each story belongs
to it's author. Most stories are from anonymous writers that have
posted them freely on the Internet." but that's it. At least there
is a silver lining: I wanted to know who wrote such a neat story,
so I Googled on "Young Sorceress" and found my way to your page. :)"
- Emil, 25 Feb 03
Hello! I've been a fan
of your stories for over a year now.
I keep coming back to your site even though I know all the stories by heart
now. Others just don't do it. I wanted to ask you if you could
suggest a few authors and websites where I can read some more stories like
your's. I particularly enjoy the mc, ff, gr, and in aspects.
Thanks!" Dc, 24 Feb 03
Hi there JRParz! The basic premise of
the story "Beach Babes"
is good but the actual story is a bit thin. Maybe you should have
taken the reader through the week that Michael had with them rather than
just dropping them into the situation they ended in. WHo am I to
say tho, my stories are not perfect either." A
reader, 21 Feb 2003
heya JR, I was a little concerned when you
suddenly and abruptly removed the bulk of your stories from the mcstories
site. Now I see you wanted to edit and revise a few of them. Cool.
I enjoyed 'Daughter of Desire'
and 'Horny Little Valentine'
the first time I read them, but submitting them again this way gave me
the chance to get reacquainted with them once again. I like the small
changes in HLV, very much so. As for DOD, I used it and Trent's original
story as a basis for my own Dominoe chapters. I'm hoping you find the time
to do another Dominoe story as well; Trent is working with someone-who's-name-I-forget
on another chapter now, and I'm waiting for them to finish before I complete
my story, for continuity's sake. Good to see your stories coming
back up, man. Talk to ya later... gotta run to class. J.Darksong,
Writer 19 Feb 03.
I'm curious as to why you pulled all your old
stories off the MCStories archive, but are now putting new ones there?
(I had relied on it as the home of the Master PC stuff, and without yours
it can hardly be that. Though the work others have done makes the idea
of a MPC Universe frayed to the point of impossibility... Pendragon tried
to make all persons but himself lose knowledge of the program (unless someone
else previously insulated himself against any such effort and perhaps arranged
for someone trying what Pendragon did to get false feedback), while the
"version 2.0" with a light-year range eliminates a limitation i think needed
to make things interesting). Anyway,I wanted to write in response
to "My Horny Little Valentine"...
I was bothered throughout by the lack of physical description of the girls...
how are we supposed to know what he sees in them if all we have is a bare
assurance that they are attractive? I realize some writers leave
it to readers to fill in the blanks, but I am a reader who never considers
it appropriate to do so, (just as I would not want wrong interpretations
of my own writing) and am simply annoyed by the lack of detail.
L.E., 17 Feb 2003
DOMINOE: Daughter of Desire...
What a great title... you have done fantastic, outstanding. and thanks
for sharing your writing talents. This story has so many ways
it can go in a sequel... Again. thanks! Okay, as far as Horny
Little Valentine goes, lets get Holly suited
up for a long lasting fucking session with Darlene and Jessica. while your
man Jarrod gets his turn. Like the story plot, so feel free to continue...
Thanks, B, 16 Feb 2003
Neat little story (Horny
Little Valentine)! :o) I would love
to see a sequel!
M, 16 Feb 2003
"Horny Little Valentine"
is a good story, if a bit sparse. Have you ever tried to write things
out a bit more fully? I'd like to see the scenes a bit longer and
more involved, and a bit more background in the characters. You have
potential and there are more than enough "I fucked her mind and then I
fucked her" stories on the EMCSA. I have actually read a number
of your works and I'm referring more to an ability to construct a narrative.
It seems like you leave gaps in the story that (sorry) kill the flow.
I'm envious of your ability to create a plot and situation, and I really
would like to see you improve as a writer. A lot of people have potential.
The question is whether or not you live up to it. Also, and this
is just a realist and his nitpicking, there is no pheromone for female
arousal. Primates do not have estrus per se, and even if they did
it would be the males reacting to female pheromones and not vice versa.
14 Feb 2003
I'm sure you get a lot of this but I'd
just like to thank you for all of your stories,
not many authors have contributed so much good work.
Grazz, 11 Feb 2003
Little Valentine". One word...
Nice : ) vincent, 9 Feb 2003
Dear JR Parz: It is my pleasure to inform
you that your story, Master PC,
has been nominated for a Black Dragon Award. This award is given
by the members of the Electronic Wilderness Publishing website. In
order for you to be eligible for voting, however, we need permission to
post your story on our site for the length of the voting cycle (4 weeks).
At which time, you may ask us to remove the story if you don't want us
posting it. You may feel free to deny us posting permission.
It will, however, disqualify you from the award, due to the awards rules.
Please get back to me with a response as soon as possible, please. If you
wish to review the rules for the BDA, you can find them on our site.
http://www.ewp.org Thank you for your time, and good luck! The
EWP Admin, 6 Feb 2003
JR, I was just at your website and read over
your favorite MC movies.
I think you might like a movie I saw as a junior high kid called "I'm Dangerous
Tonight". It stars Madchen Amick of "Twin Peaks" fame. It was
originally shown on the USA Network, so there is no nudity in it (at least
the version I saw.) it does have some good "mind manipulation." Amick plays
a nice girl. Once she puts on a certain cursed dress, however, she transforms
into a vixen. A physical transformation takes place as well, with her going
from dowdy to sexy in the cursed, red dress. Good scene is her seducing
a football player in the back of a limo. Somehow, the dress comes off,
and she reverts back to her wholesome self, flabbergasting the jock. I
don't know if this is true MC, since there is no one behind the manipulation,
but an interesting movie nonetheless. BTW, I was wondering if you
were a fan of Tabico's "Socket." I didn't notice it among your picks, and
I thought if any story of hers would be there, it would be "Socket". It
seems right up your alley, just by judging from your posts and the many
stories of your that I have read. Anyway, please keep up the good work.
Thanks for the great MF work, although any sub-category you dabble in seems
to come out great. I would offer my opinions of your stories, but honestly,
I like them all and can find no faults. To re-use the tires cliche
from earlier, they are "right up my alley." Thank you for listening. A
Great Fan, Oz, 29 Jan 03
Hey JR, Been a fan of your writing for quite
awhile. Glad to see you having stuff ("What
would you Wish for?")back up on the website
. I like the stuff you write about. In particular, the stories about
twins. I am wondering if you ever thought about doing a story about
triplets? I always thought it would be interesting if... I
can't write the stuff you do but I sure do enjoy reading it. I look
forward to your next story. Glad to see your stuff is back on the
web." maedemons, 27 Jan 03
"Fantastic story ("What
would you Wish for?") and a nice ending as
we wonder if the new gf.will be the next recipent of the wishmaker T.
great sex interactions which makes a 3 and 4 some so much fun.
thanks..B., 27 Jan 03
Well, It has been awhile dear! Thanks for the
wonderful erotica ("What would you Wish for?")!!...
I just love your writing style...hot, hot, hoot!.. Don't take so long in
posting another one. P.S., I hope your professional writing is going well.
And, please when you do get published even in adult mag. Please email so,
I can support you!!!...er, your writing dear, writing!!!!!! Have a wonderful
new year..be safe in these messed up times.. maria,
26 Jan 03
I see that your sabbatical from writing stories
has not dulled your style. I look forward to more of this ("What
would you Wish for?") quality. I always enjoy
the subtle twists you throw in for fun. (Thank god the totem is fiction.
If I had it... well... Power corrupts...)" Micheal
Smyth, MC Fan till the end of time, 26 Jan 03
I just would like to say your stories have
been some of the if not the best stories I have read. Your works
are pure genius thank you for reposting them, it will be fun and no doubt
erotic to read improved versions of my favorite stories Thanks again. Box,
19 Jan 03
Hello, I recently came upon the "Hall
of Fame Stories". Great stuff!
You have done a real service in selecting some of the best authors for
your list. I also found the names of some new ones that i really
liked. Of course, I was pleased to see one my stories among that
talented company. Regards, Don Winslow,
3 Jan 03
As it happens, I stumbled across your website
through the fault of a friend, and he belives I should write a little story
about your "Master PC'
creation. You see, I have a universe of my own in which I write stories,
and it struck him (and after actually reading Master PC, me as well) as
a rather unique plot device. So, at his prompting, I've written the beginning
of a story intertwining the plot thread of Master PC with my own, and I'd
like to see what you think of it. Mr. Author,
17 Dec 02
JR Parz; I just finished reading
USA, and I loved it. I was wondering
if you were ever going to work on your spin-off to Cassandra
Derek, 16 Dec 02
This was a great story! I
CAN HANDLE THIS, THE SEQUEL. I wanted to know
if you could tell me more about vampire stories. I love stories with vampires
in them, mostly with male vampire, but I take female vamps, too. I think
I have found all the ones on MIND CONTROL, but I wanted to know are there
anymore sites where I could find them. Tscorpion,
11 Nov 02
JR, I've enjoyed your stories, and I hope
to read more in the future. I was admiring your celebrities gallery
and I noticed that you didn't mention that Katherine Heigl spent a season
playing "Glory" on Buffy. You don't want to miss those episodes.
Thanks for your hard work!
Oberon, 9 Nov 02
Hello, i read "Alien's
Gift" and i loved it. i even manged
to find the spin off about Jade. i was just wondering if there will
a chapter 8 coming soon. i really hope so. well thanks for the great read.
30 Oct 03
Hello, I have just begun writing
erotic fiction, and decided to e-mail you as you are by far my faviorite
author in this genre. I have attached my first story, and ask that
you read it, and I give permission to post them if they measure up to the
standards of one of your pages of other people's work. Thank you
for your time, and all the great reads. This
is my pen name: "Iriancrshara.", 28 Oct 02
Dear Mr Parz, I have looked high and low
for good Transformation/transgender stories and have written a number of
my own (which have never been released, and probably won’t be) but I just
thought I’d drop a quick note to say thanx for all the work you put into
your site. Both yourself and others e.g. Nifty… give so much without asking
for anything in return. Anyway thanks again and keep up the good work."
21 Oct 02
JR, I've been a fan of 'all' of your works
in recent years and I sympathize with your view of perfection in your art.
I hope your promise to your wife turns into a wonderful life of writing,
and I thank you for all of the hard work and effort you have put forth
into all of your works. Offering stories on the net for free has
most recently been a brutal task, and while many authors have thrown up
their hands and abandoned their craft, you have the courage to strive for
perfection and perhaps a career. For this I applaud you. Thank
You for offering us a peak into your world,
JM, 9 Oct 02
"As a long time fan of your work, I respect
your decision for a sabatical. I wish you the best in your endeavors.
You deserve it."
Micheal Smyth, 6 Oct 02
I wonder why -when I read the statement on
MC...then I went to your homepage and read your statement. Watching
your writing progress...I would agree...You're leaps and bounds over the
average quality er, quanity of the stories on MC. IMO, only a handfull
of writers are at your level. However, we've gone over this topic a year,
or so ago. I wish you luck and happeness in RL dear! And, I await
to 'hear' when you are publish. Hey, I will buy the book (s) when you get
publish!!!!!! But, Dear remember, No matter how well you write, until
you get to Stephen King's level, you'll always have an editor who will
(butcher) edite your work (smile). takecare and please post once
in awhile...gotta feed the fans...smile. Never let the story get
in the way of slut....A quote from one of the slash sites I read a lot...
hugs and have a productive, safe, year....maria
amaro, 6 Oct 02
Well I must say I am disappointed to see
your stories being removed as I have found they are well written and thought
out. When you say that net writing was a step to other things I do
hope you are speaking of writing your own novel. I think you have
the talent and judging from the obvious amount of effort put into both
your stories and web site you have the dedication. Good luck for
the future and don't forget to let all of your fans know if you get published.
5 Oct 02
After allowing "the French" translate my "Athena's
G-Spot" story, Philippe shot me off some feedback
from his readers... "All of them liked the story, it appealed a lot
to one lady in particular, who I think has a submissive strain in her,
while another lady wrote that she was surprised that Tony did not try to
take control over Athena. What I liked about the story is it wasn't
far removed from reality (i.e no SciFi), just a bored housewife everyday
story. Philippe, 3 Oct 02
Why did you request to have your stories
removed? You had EASILY the BEST on the site??? Well I hope you continue
to create such masterpieces in the future…. David,
2 Oct 02
Why would you remove your stories from the
stories archive? You are one of the best authors. It seems
a shame to remove these stories. You are definitely going to be missed.
I hope you choose to write more for this site. Sasha,
2 Oct 02
"Just wanted to let you know how much I have
enjoyed your stories on the net and express my confident expectation that
you will be successful in your new direction. I hope to soon be purchasing
your works at the local bookstore. With best wishes and great thanks,
28 Sep 02
My Good Friend J.R., Recently you deleted my
previous offering "Lydia's Tale" at my request. I do read mcstories,
and for quite some time I've had a great admiration both for your work
as well as your ability to sort the wheat from the chaff re: your site.
When I read today that you had requested your stories be deleted from mcstories.com
my curiosity was aroused. IMSIRMAX2,
28 Sep 02
Mr. JRParz, I'm really sorry to see that you've
had your stories removed from the Erotic Mind Control Story Archive.
I'd enjoyed reading your work, and your Master PC has become a classic
and the basis for many other writers' creative efforts. I myself
had just begun writing another chapter in the MasterPC
universe. If it's not too much to ask, are
your stories published anywhere else online, or are you removing your web
presence entirely? Dave, 28 Sep 02
Just read your notice on ASSTR and want
to tell you that I have greatly enjoyed your stores over the past year.
I understand about commitments and perfection-your writing style has matured
and so has the depth of the characters and emotions. I will continue
to look at you're web page for new stories and for revisions of old.
If you go further and actually seek publication, please let this fan know
so that he can purchase your works. I wish you the best for the future
and hope that you will not be discouraged or get distracted. You
have a gift-please don't let it go to waste. There are two things
I would especially want to caution you for the future as you seek towards
this "perfection" in your writing. Never forget those you are writing
to and don't loose touch with your audience and the second is to avoid
the omitting of emotions, like some published writers have done.
Write to your audience, and not just to perfect your craft. If you
succeed in doing this, you will be a celebrated author and not just a writer.
28 Sep 02
I very much enjoyed your stories: in content,
in style, in development and your presence as one of the cornerstones of
the forum. Are you posting your stories elsewhere? What are your plans
for your erotica writing career? Pax, Ploni
Almoni, 27 Sep 02
"hello~s~ we have not met but I would just
like to say thank you for your hard work and the way you have run this
forum...I am not a frequent poster,but I do read the forum regularly and
think you did a wonderful job~ss~...I hope you will also continue your
writing and again thank you for all your efforts... Dianne,
27 Sep 02
Why Did you take your stories off of The
Erotic Mind-Control Story Archive thats the only way I have of reading
one of the most tanlnted writers in the world. John,
27 Sep 02
"Just curious as to why you had all of
your stories removed from mcstories.com. I really enjoyed your stories,
and I visit your website once a week or so, but I was wondering why you
did this? Is there a particular reason?" Most
Sincerely, Dan, 25 Sep 02
Why have you removed your stories ????
I have enjoyed reading them and now wished I had down loaded them. So,
When are you going to bring them back so we can read them again and again???
And add to them???............Saddened Mike,
25 Sep 02
Hey, I’m just writing this to ask why you’ve
had your excellent stories removed from the Mind Control Stories website?
I’ve read them before, but they were of such high quality, I think it is
a shame that they’ve been removed. Thanks for your time, I eagerly await
your answer." rob, 25 Sep 02
"Hey! Just dropping you a line to
say… Your stories TRULY rock.
Keep up the fab work." Z, 4 Sep 2002
"I simply loved the story, "Beach
Babes" and I'm looking forward to more.
I just felt the odd need to make a comment, these little pieces really
do get you going. They're certainly fun to read with a special someone..
:) Thankyou so very much for your noble contribution!" Steve,
27 August 2002
Hello, I am a frequent visitor to the BE Archive
where I read your story Jennifer's Transformation.
Needless to say, I enjoyed it. I was wondering if the story was finished,
or if you had plans to make a sequal. I was just wondering, as curiosity
often results. Thank you for your time, Tide,
25 Aug 2002.
"hello: i just read your story "SORCERER'S
CURSE" and enjoyed it very much. it
sure excited me as i read it. do you have any other stories printed
and where i can find them? i would sure appreciate it if you
could direct me to them." ippy, 19 Aug