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"Dear JRParz, You are the best author in
the mind control erotic story field. I think 'The
Agency' is the best story over all that I
have read. You should think of getting your work published in some
of the sex magazines. You are one of the best authors overall that I have
read. If you could write me back when you cum out with chapter 4
and so on." Sincerely, M. Downes, 15
"Hi, I have been browsing around and I
found your Master PC
story. It is one of the best ideas ever created. When I read the
first story, I liked it, but not all that much. When I found all
of the other stories made by the fans I realised that you had created a
totally new world just for us :-). I am still reading your stories
in my spare time and I hope you realise what a wonderful idea you have
injected into the Mind Control Story Archive. Keep up the good work and
I suggest you read Eclectic's Edition if you haven't already, got to go...
11 Oct 2000
I really liked your alien's
gift story and I will be sad if you don't
write another series." Mei Kau, 7 Oct
"another fantastic work (Agency,
Chapter Three - Ties that Bind), absolutely
love the execution of the plot - as always very well done. Also,
the poll idea is neat.
The ideas behind The
Agency are very reminisc of those 1970 cult
favs like Soylent Green - where you have those apartments for the rich
that includes a beautiful babe as part of the "furniture", or even Great
Fields of Gold (cant remember the name exactly) which is similar plot as
Soylent Green where the world is over populated and our food supply is
Great Fields of Gold tells the story of
how a young woman from one of the outlying farm fortresses (got to protect
the land and the food as all other places have been poluted or are toxic/irradiated)
goes to the city to stop her father from going to a "Ascendancy Centre"
where you go to die. She catches the eye of a rich power broker and
he sets out to seduce her. In the end she is so depressed that she
goes to an Ascendancy Centre herself, but instead of being fed a drug which
kills, the power borker pays to have her made into a slave.
When you go into an Acesdency centre you
are treated to a sense surround of how the world was like before -
when there were vast fields of green, trees and wildlife. She gets
hypnotised in this room - and the blady film ends. we are given a
hint that there is an agency working to brainwash the populace - make them
into slaves(use imagination) or "persuade" them to go to an ascendancy
centre to die. We find that our food is grown from the dead bodies
of these people coz our earth is dying and we are running out of materials
to grow our foods. They are actually very depressing films, Thank
god yours are more... err... entertaining. Thank you for over 4 years
of entertainment - i've followed your work since 4 years ago that is, i
think." Roy Goh, 7 Oct 2000
"Dear JR Parz, I just finished reading
your two chapters of "The Agency's Early Years."
It's like a condensed version of "The Agency" proper. :) Will
Barbara pick up on her roomate's name right away in the third chapter?
Was it in the reports she must have read while studying Ashley's disappearance?
Only time will tell--how suspensful!" Yours,
Lituus, 5 Oct 2000
"Dear JR Parz, I would like to thank you
again for your invaluable website; it has been more than a year since
I first wrote to you, and I still visit
it a couple of times each week (if not every day). Since then, you
and others have also blessed our community with a message board.
I am hesitant to post a message on it, but I appreciate being able to read
the opinions of my favorite authors. Thank you!
I recently read and enjoyed the third chapter
of "The Agency"
on the EMCSA. :) However, I feel that the last scene with Dave
and Gina in it doesn't fit with the rest of the story. I would like
to offer the following constructive criticism.
(It's very ponderous, because I'm addressing
your timeline. I do not wish to offend you, or detract from your
work of naughtiness. ^_^)
Gina and Tracy made love one night (very
hot!); you refer to the next day in the hedding: "II. (Next morning,
Maxwell McCarthy's Office, Regional Headquarters, Northern California)."
This is your second part labeled with the Roman numeral II. That
notwithstanding, Dave finds out about his purpose in The Agency.
Part III takes place after the meeting is over, and Part IV takes place
two hours afterwards. A key passage in this part is, "She sat there
quite naked looking incredibly 'hot'...as she told him about her new relationship
with Gina," which explicitly explains how Max McCarthy knows of the relationship
between the two roomates--from Tracy's vantage point.
You then cut to Part V, "(About 35 miles
outside San Francisco)." I assume that it it happening at the same
time as Parts III and IV.
Then you cut to Part VI, "(Next morning
at the residence of Tom Cyr)." I assume that this means the same
morning as Parts III, IV, and V, but it's a bit ambiguous.
The problem arises when you write:
"VII. (Same morning...a few hours later, Dave's private room, Regional
Headquarters, Northern California)." Again, I assume that it's the
same morning as Parts III, IV, and V--but if it's not, then it's either
one or two mornings after the day with the meeting that Dave has with his
superiors . . . depending on how one places the slightly ambiguous Part
Why do I question your time frame?
After all, I'm positive I understand what you're saying--that all of this
is happening at different times on the day after Gina and Tracy make love.
If this is true, then Dave's actions towards
Gina are not justified. Max and Dave agreed that they should not
reveal their knowledge of the secretaries' reprogramming, nor let on to
the fact that they are having a relationship--at least until the two women
grow accustomed/can handle it, and are not likely to suspect mind tampering.
(I don't have Chapter 2 open, and I'm offline, so I can't quote what you
But you write, "A little different than
a tongue job from your new girl friend...isn't it?" Dave chuckled."
Are you implying that the two have had a few-hour-long session in between
the time when Dave got back from his meeting and 'now'? Perhaps you
are. Why, though, should Dave say, "Someone...uuggghhh...someone
close to me recommended... ahhhhh... recommended that I remind you who
your first priority is... It's important you remember this"? Shouldn't
Sam Harrington, of all people, know that Gina's love and loyalty to Dave
can never be supplanted by Tracy? And wouldn't Dave remind his uncle
of this, even if Harrington did mention this?
Moreover, the following exchange,
"Wendy is going to finish you up...and while
she's tonguing you, I'm going to be ramming into her."
"But...but I'm... I'm not into girls." Gina
responded...not understanding why Dave was doing this to her."
stresses the fact that Dave has neither
explained away Gina's new feelings, as Max did, nor given her time to relax
her suspicions about further mind control. (McCarthy didn't either,
but his conversation works well with the week the two women lived together.)
With "But I don't feel anything for the
other girls." Gina responded fearfully," her alarm bells should have been
ringing loud and clear. Did you write that Gina and Tracy know their
programming, since they can use 100% of their intellegence? I don't
remember if you did or not. (And their intellegences both seem to
be almost twice of a 'normal' score of 100.) Assuming that you did,
Gina should be putting up mental resistance/grievances--as opposed to emotional
ones, which she has no control over. If she doesn't know about the
'Gina Marie Honey'
trigger, then she should be even more surprised
at this mental manipulation--and then, as an attorney with a 202 I.Q.,
jump to the conclusion that Dave went back on his word (I don't remember
if he gave his word, but I think he did) about not hypnotizing her again.
To sum up my criticism: it can be
argued that your timeline is ambiguous, and more importantly, the last
scene with Dave and Gina is not consistant with the ground rules set between
Dave and Max. Nor can Gina be expected to suspend her critical and
analytical skills, even 'in heat.' If she is carried away by the
moment, she'll return to her *hot* :) and calculating self,
which probably spells incalculable mischief for Dave and any plans that
you have for him in Chapter 4.
I hope that I haven't offended you by thrashing
out these parts and scenes. I would love to hear back from you on
Finally, I hope that this correspondence
motivates me to write to my favorite MC authors; I don't repay all of you
comments as I should.
Yours, Lituus, 5 Oct 2000
"Hey there! This is the first
time I do give feed back to an author. So actually, I don't know
what you may wish to learn from me. What I can tell you is that "The
Agency" is one of the best stories, and this
chapter was also good. I can see that
you don't know too much were to go with this story. The sex scenes
are good, the imagination is also well built. I did like a lot "The
book", but the more you read it the less sex scenes you get, I think this
is a pitty. You should go on with the new chapter in Australia for
the nefew, but nerver forget the sex scenes and you don't need to find
a governmental agency that will try to put these guys down. I also
believe you should not find a chemical way to dominate males also.
Hoping this is what you need to know from your readers, I remain." Yours,
ViauH, 3 Oct 2000
"Great job. I just read all three
chapters of 'The Agency'
and I can't wait for more. Keep up the good work."
Tony R., 1 Oct 2000
the undisputed KING reviewer of the MC Forum, reviews "The
Agency, Chapter Three: At last--a personal
thing for me, seeing how the story resumed. Wanted to see what befell
Tracey and Gina. Pretty much what I expected, and it was nice. :) JR balances
exposition in his evil org. with the enjoyable torment of the slaves, and
the insidious but insistent f/f urges in the new recruit are an interesting
counterpoint to Tracey's breathless discovery. Some hiccups as far
as what's going on: while the interludes with Tom and others are hot to
read, they're a bit disconnected. JR leads with a recommendation
to check out earlier segments of this tale and its Early Years sibling,
but there should be something here to explain who some of these characters
are. On the other hand, seeing Gina triggered by the 'honey' phrase
of fond memory, and Tracey's head is an increasingly fun place to visit
(if not perhaps to live, but even that's changing). As usual, JR's
cruel Mdoms are balanced by sympathetically-drawn victim/slaves, and there's
both story and seduction to be found. Thanks, JR.
"hey jr, your story
janene wishes rules!!! it has some twists
and turns and i like it a lot :) just figured i would let u know
:) " laurie grrrl, 30 Sep 2000
"Sabrina & Tabitha - Teenage Witches"
a Great story!!! More, more, more!!!"
29 Sep 2000
"I was just at your website and I have
to say: You had just better get to rewritting that Cassandra
(-Vampiress) story, cause the grammar, syntax,
spelling, word usage, and all that really, really sucks ass!
You're freaking crazy for ending the story with a horrible ending (5th
Chapter). Most of your stories are pretty
decent. I was waiting a long time for that final
(5th) chapter of "Cassandra
- Vampiress", but when I finally read it I
was like: This is shit! You could have done MUCH better, hell, even I could
have. The 5th section just WAS NOT believable. The first four parts
were good in content (aside from heavy grammatical mistakes (esp. in sentence
structure-DAMN!), but the 5th part basically sucked. Thank you for
listening." J.P., 28 Sep 2000
DEAR MR. JR PARZ... I am a huge fan of
your work and love all your stories. I first came across your work
on asstr and then moved over to your web, which is forever on of my favorites.
I especially love Sabrina and Tabitha,
The Alien`s Gift,
and Master PC (
which I think is the greatest mind control story ever). I have been
reading mind control stories for years know and never knew what great mind
control stories were till I read your work." Zorro,
20 Sep 2000
"Hi there! I've just finished reading
Gift, and i have to admit, it is GOOD!
I hope to see Chapter 6 out soon, if you dont already have it out, in witch
case, i would of course want to know where it is. I realy hope it
will be soon!" Mike, 20 Sep 2000
Friends... "Only more public humiliation was
lacking, otherwise GREAT!" Lord Kenn, 19 Sep
"I think that "Master
PC" might be a great idea, but "Alien's
Gift" is a great story!!!" Anonymous,
18 Sep 2000
"While I do love Alien's
Gift, I believe that Master
PC is the best mind control story line, bar
Anonymous, 16 Sep 2000
Warlock's Toys': "VERRRRY NICE!! Really,
the BE was great, it wasn't made the SOLE reason, and the well-rounded
and believable characters (I could get behind Derek's motivations, after
magic and a trifle of getting jaded had come my way) Make this a BLISTERING
tale!! More Power to you.. and more toys for Derek!!" Blaze,
14 Sep 2000
of the revision of "Janene's Wishes".
"This story goes back a couple of years, having been edited 'for grammatical
purposes' and re-presented with 'a nip and tuck here and there'. J R Parz
demonstrates once more that a bloke can overcome all the odds and pull
a bird despite being called Derek. Of course, our Del-Boy's got a bit of
help; he can scan girls' minds, surround himself with friendly vibes and
grant wishes with no strings attached — cash, cars, tits, a sex slave.
Naturally, in the face of this charming chat, Janene blushes, presumably
prettily: girls who have their minds controlled are invariably good-lookers.
So how big does he make her tits?
"Breast expansion archive?
I haven't found that yet in my travels. Keep up the good work." selena,
10 Sep 2000
"Hello Sir, I just want you to know
that I love your stories on the Erotic Mind Control Story Archive, and
I hope that you write more. Thank you for your time, Sir."
Yours Truly, Jeni, 10 Sep 2000
"Hi JR, I just wanted to tell ya that I
really enjoy reading your stories. I have to admit though that I only like
the one's with a TG/TS element in them. Not that your other stories aren't
great also, I'm just TS myself and it runs with my fantasys." Anonymous,
I'll Start off by saying your stories are
very well written alot better then most of the stuff out there. Have
you even thought about writing about the origin of the Master
PC. I feel that sence you created it
only you are quilfied to write it. I feel it would be a great story.
9 Sep 2000
"I would have liked it (Spells
R Us: Lover's Desire) better if he/she had
have been the one to wear the little maid's outfit and be turned into a
submissive slave to his wife." Dreamreaper2k,
9 Sep 2000
"Hi. I just wanted to tell you that
I could not create the stories that you do. I've tried, to be honest, and
I admire you in that you can.
I enjoy reading quite of lot of them. Thank
you. I wish you well." mesmerr, writer,
9 Sep 2000
"I just wanted to send you a letter in
the wake in Simon of EMSCA comments, just to encourage you to keep up the
excellent work with you talent of writing. I particulary enjoyed
Charmed Trilogy. Well thats my two bits,
good luck and keep writing." Alex, 8 Sep 2000
"Hello J.R. Parz, I've been enjoying your
stories for at least a couple years or more... Thanks for writing all those
BE and MC stories." Paul, 7 Sep 2000
Charmed Ones Trilogy, Part Three (Prue's Turn)"...
JR, Can you please return to this great fanfic, the first two were brilliant
and i'm looking forward to the third if you ever get around to it, that
is. Please pay more attention to this story as I think the Trilogy
is one of your best works, and i'd hate to see it forgotten." Dom,
5 Sep 2000
"What I have always liked best about your
stories, is that they have mind control (of course!), but also sex 'on-camera'
and actual plots--with character development. I like to believe that your
stories could have happened to real people, somewhere..." Anonymous,
Sep 3rd 2000
"Time for a new Master
PC Story by the man that started it all..."
Anonymous, 2 Sep 2000
"I can't get the link to work for the story
My Big Mistake by Jim. It looks like an interesting concept, at any
rate. Thank you so much for maintaining this web site.
It is superb. I never cease to be amazed to think of the effort that
must go into keeping something like this going. I have been remiss
in not telling you earlier that your effort is appreciated out here." Jack,
3 Sep 2000
has a good concept, and I like the mind-control aspect, but if you had
two women under your command, wouldn't you go for a threesome?" Elsdragon,
2 Sep 2000
"I have enjoyed your stories that you have
written. Master PC
is what I started with and have continued from there. Please continue working
in the Master Pc Universe follow up on what you have started maybe you
could have two people using the program on a single target at the same
time or one after the other confusing everyone involved. Your welcome to
use these ideas. Bruce,
31 Aug 2000
"It was a hard call between the top two
leaders (Master PC and Aliens Gift)
as to what story is better... I like the characters in
Master PC better." Anonymous,
31 Aug 2000
"Dear JR. . . thank you for your site.
It is everything you say you want it to be. I just realized, that
long ago, I wrote a mind control story. A very gentle one, but what
the hey...it is at my website. . .Tigger's Scratching Post. Again,
thank you for your stories and your site...warm furries." Tiggs,
Writer, 31 Aug 2000
I was wondering if you would be writing
more on The Agency.
It is very well written and very interesting. I would like more!!
Thanks." Tamar, 30 Aug 2000
"You told me you were thinking about writing
a story outlining Master PC's
actual power. How about instead of a story, you write an instrution
manual? That would be so cool. I could do the illustrations
for you. Here is a pic to help inspire you.... Thanks." Cain,
30 Aug 2000
"I first wish to state that I am a huge
fan of your works. It is due to you that I have begun reading the mc sites.
Not a concept that is alien to me as a gamer, great tool. But I hadn't
really explored it's erotic possibilities. Thanks. Now for the "The
Pill" story (mentioned on the Back Burner
Page) you are thinking of writing. I had a couple of sudden inspirations
as to the possible side effects that I thought you might like to know about.
One: the obvious - her tits grow, just a
little with each pill. Becoming more sensitive and more demanding. But
more pills don't mean a huge increase in intelleginece, just the side effects.
Two: Her Lipstick Lesbian tendiences go
full bore, again increasing with each pill. To bad she seems to need something
stiff between her legs too...
Whats a mad scientist to do?
A few stray thoughts in the barn that is
my mind." Andrew, 28 Aug 2000
really sets the wheels turning as what I would do given the same chance
to change the people around me. Anonymous,
Aug 27th 2000
"I hope that all of the stories
are continued but I would love to see Alien's
Gift done because I would love to see more
of Colts adventures." Anonymous, Aug
is definatly one of the coolest story lines on the net. Your style
is great and the fact that you make the main character realize what he
has forced apon the women was a "BAD" thing made it even more interesting,
as well as being able to know what the women's REAL thoughts were, not
just what they were forced to think. YOU RULE!" Anonymous,
25 Aug 00
"Twins Enslavement - Amber's Tale:
JR's controllers generally have instant near-total control over their victims'
minds and bodies. That's something I generally dislike (my "magic
wands" guideline), but JR explores the possibilities of total control with
a thoroughness that I find quite enjoyable. The characters in "Twins
Enslavement" are well drawn, especially the dilettante warlock. Sinner,
Writer, 19 Aug 2000
"Good story jr referance warlocks
toys." Joe, 18
"on the master
pc website is says that theses are the only
pix of the control screen but xanthos has a pic on his site that looks
a lot better and is more modern. he's the one who put me on to your
site. your a good writer you should consider joing the wolf pack
www.the-wolpack.com for info i'll send you my story ifg? when i finish
it." Paddy Wac, 17 Aug 2000
"i would like to know if I could read
more of 'Jennifer's Transformation',
because i loved it!"
Starscape, 17 Aug 2000
"Hey JRParz... Im a really big Master
PC fan and i wanted to know if you could write
a story featureing a 15-16 yr old teenage who has read all the stories
and dreams about finding the actual Master PC program and then actually
does. I would do it myself but I cant write for shit. All im good
for is coming up with ideas. So if you could write this story I would really
appreciate it." QBall, 17 Aug 2000
A Warlock's Toys reviewed
by R & D: "Ladies; a friendly warning.
If you're feeling good and looking great in powder-blue spandex, your sports
bra barely disguising the turgid nipples of your $3000-a-side breasts,
and you answer the door to find a cute young guy standing there, don't
let him in. Especially if he tells you his name is Derek Warlock. I mean,
what kind of a name is Derek?
So, you're sitting next to him on the couch,
you've handed him one-by-the-neck out of the fridge and told him your bra
size (only 34C, but this is a J R Parz story). Ma'am, you're going to have
to draw the line somewhere. This is Y2K America, and nice girls are saving
it for their husbands. And let's face it, the guy's a creep. Isn't he?
Whatever, he seems to have discovered the
secret of charming the birds out of the trees while remaining utterly charmless
himself. He's a most splendid role model.
The author describes this as a slightly
darker tale than his usual stories, and hopes that we will take it for
the fiction that it is. Well, Heaven forfend that anyone should ever assume
that authors really do all those things they write about. That would surely
mean that none of these MC authors can ever get themselves laid.
"I liked this story (A
Warlock's Toys) a lot, it had much potential,
but not enough BE I would have wished for the girls breasts to get bigger,
and have more detailed BE scenes... but other than that, great read."
Annonymous, 11 Aug 2000
"Love your story The Alien's
Gift can not wait until you come out with
more chapters if you do. Which I hope you do. Later and may your
creativity flow." Devilstar, 10 Aug 2000
Janene's Wishes: The writer goes to
great lengths to grant the girl 3 wishes on the way to turning her into
a lesbian bimbo. You can't help wondering why he didn't just do it,
seeing as that was plainly what he wanted to do all along, and she couldn't
have stopped him anyway. The writers relationship with Lady Ashley
is rather obscure, as is the reason for and extent of his powers.
It is written nicely though! Overall a rather unusual story that
seems rather pointless.
Scores (of 10)
All the best, Mark,
8 Aug 2000
"JR, I've been neglecting to write and
tell you that I thought Beach Babes
was great. As opposed to some of your other epics, this was a nice,
short and sweet little tale with patented Parz humor thrown in for good
measure. I like the matter-of-fact dialogue from the babes, especially
Heather. I liked when she told Jade to give her boobs a good workout
and the ending... just my cup of tea! Do more of these! Trent
Wolf, Writer, 25 Jul 2000
Babes kicked ass! More would be nice."
25 Jul 2000
Sara H. picked this as one of her favorites
on the EMCSA's Readers Pick Page: "Sabrina
and Tabitha, the Teenage Witches" "JRParz
has a particular take on things, which he will readily admit. For me, this
story is among his best. The seductions are playful, hot, and irresistable,
and the twists and turns of this story of love, sex and good and evil (and
who knows which is which) are incredibly arousing (which I'm sure he would
be pleased to hear). Sabrina is kind and innocent... Tabitha, her double,
is evil and horny. When they meet, it is like mixing up a batch of TNT...
and just as breathtaking to watch as they explode together. And her aunts
get treated well too... a happy ending, and just as sexy as the rest of
"Hi. I like "I
Can Handle This: The Sequel". You have
an insight into thought trains that kept me interested until the last word.
Great work." Mesmerr, Writer, 16 July
Mind Control Forum's Trilby Else Reviews:
Can Handle This: The Sequel: "JR, regret
to inform you--you're writing literature. :) Less mysterious
than the original, but JR's going another way. Being one for serial recruitment,
I like his way of doing it. The Lit comment is the level of emotional complexity
he's been introducing in his victims, which plays into the plot itself,
here, and IMO makes it hotter. Since JR's goal is, as he says, AROUSAL,
it's win-win." Trilby Else, Writer, 15 July
was one of the first stories I read in this genre and is still one of my
favorites. I've been waiting to read Chapter 3 for a while now and I hope
that you will release it soon." John, 7 July 2000
REVIEWED AT R&D:
"We haven't had a J R Parz story review for a while, although there's a
mention of the Master PC universe
elsewhere in this page. You remember J R? If you fancy a girl and you don't
have the personality and charm to win her heart, J R can make her yours.
The up-side is that you get to remain as unpersonable and as charmless
as you were before, while the girl becomes submissive and hot to trot at
a moment's notice, with the added bonus of a few extra inches in the foundation
garment department. "Friends
is another of those stories. It contains the required elements: a singularly
unpleasant young man, a helpful nerd who somehow produces powerful lust
potions without blowing the neighbourhood to smithereens, and a disposable
girl. The girl obeys all the rules of the game, including the Law
of Minimum Acceptable Breast Expansion which applies to all MC stories.
If you are turned on while reading this story, you are probably fully justified
in worrying about your condition."
"dear Sir, i miss your emails. they
make me happy <giggle> . that sounds dum i know. but your
like a superstar online. i just read your new story Friends.
it was only OK. you can do better. it wasnt evil enuff.
the girls in it should be forced more against there will. stuff like
that. talk more about CLOTHING! any reel girl loves fashone
and wants to here more about it. and most guys that IM me the first
thing they ask me is "what are you whereing?" see what i mean?"
veronica doll, 6 July 2000
"Serena - Teen Witch Meets A Vampire"
is a good story and I'm hoping that you will continue it. It is most
certainly a very tantilizing tale." J.R.WIL, 5 July 2000
is a truely hot and erotic. I couldn't stop reading it and can hardly
wait for the next installment." J.R.
Will, 5 July 2000
"My thanks... I try and send you a note
now and then telling you what a great site you have, I have no talent in
putting pen to paper, or finger to key , as it is ,*grin* you have
far surpassed most other sites...what with your different pages of links
and showcasing other writers...not to mention your own great writting style
....In finishing, again my thanks for all the work that you put into your
site and for the enjoyment it gives me." Chris,
4 July 2000
though I don't always go for the mind control/slave stories, I really enjoyed
this story. The characters were good, the plot was good, and the
length of the story was perfect. A really good job. I had to
give a point off overall, though, because of the Britney Spears referance.
Sorry." Lefty, 2 July 2000
"JR, Please write more on The
Charmed Ones Trilogy, "Prue's Prison" (the
third chapter) as its a fantastic fic."
Dom, 1 July 2000
"Loved the story (A
Warlock's Toys), JR, but willing to speak
up for your other efforts that tug the emotional context more strongly.
The Warlock just didn't seem to care what happened next, so I found it
Eye of Serpent, Writer, 20 Jun 2000
hi Sir, my name is Veronica. i am
a life-sized Barbie Doll. you may here that alot from girls but its
true. i am 25 years old and have been a real time slave/sub under
my Master for over 3 years now. i was born in Melbourne, Australia
but moved here when i was 19. my Master has a fetish for Barbie Doll
looking women so he has spent much of his time and money (and mine) transforming
me these past few years. here are my measurments if you dont beleve
vanilla blonde, mid-back length hair
25 years old
no body hair below my eyes.
trust me, i LIVE the life of a blonde bimbo.
when i read your stories i get soooo wet. my Master reads them too
and it gives him ideas. why do you think i went up from a C cup to
a D cup this past year. and if he keeps reading your stories, i'll
go up even more <giggle> . not that i would mind. its not
like a stay home all day and suck his cock. i work at a clothing
store in the city too. (but i hate it :)
but i know what my real position in life
is. i am his fuck doll. his sex toy. and i love it!
anyway you are probably wondering why i emailed you.
first i want to thank you! living
my life is very pleasurble but it is not easy. you ever try typing
with inch long pink nails? or sleeping in a corset? maybe showeing
in 6 inch heels b/c 5 inch heels hurt your calfs. if i wear anything
less then that, i think i would scream in pain. its been too long
that ive been wearing such high heels that anythign short just wont do.
and my hair! i have to get up two hours early just to get ready for
work. you should see my wardrobe too. i am soooo proud of it!
God now i really sound like a ditz. anyway, im not all bimbo.
i do read you know. i read your stories that is. <giggle>
you have so many though. its hard and i get lost sometimes.
but i keep reading!
so i just wanted to ask you which ones are
the best for a girl like me. i love reading about smart woman who
are turned into airheads. MM breasts are fine, but they are too yuck
looking. i dont like girls with tits that big. the most i would
ever go is EE probably (but dont tell Master). and that would hurt my back
alot. so i like stories that have more fashion. more clothing.
i am a clothes freak! anythign pink and feminine i would wear.
all my skirts are cut high on the hem. i have all sorts of costumes
(french maid, milk maid, nurse, school girl, baby girl, baby doll, pony
girl ((i even went to a pony girl camp for one week)) and lots more).
i have about 34 pairs of high heeled shoes and boots. i even have
baby doll dresses from Lullaby that we had to order from England and Germany.
some of them say Fuck Doll on them. (i love that outfit that the
girl wears in your story that
says TITS). my Master calls me then
alot because of that.
anyway, the keywords here are: bimbo, airhead,
pink clothing, feminine, long nails, high heels, and BARBIE DOLLS!!!!
have more stories where smart woman are turned into Barbie Dolls!
not real dolls that are too small. but lifesized Barbie Dolls!
I would orgasm just from reading those. its my life story <giggle>
thank you thank you thank you! i love
you and your stories. email me back if you can. ta ta
Veronica Doll, 20 Jun 2000
JR, I just read Warlock's
Toys. I really enjoyed the story,
I think it is one of your best yet. Till the next story.
Master E., 19 June 2000
A Review of "A
Warlock's Toys": "JRParz, like
Anynom, has a basic theme, and the craft is how he executes it each time.
Instead of celeb inductions, his MCers play with aware victims and enjoy
it thoroughly, sometimes framing it with bodymod. Some of this (bodymod
aside) I like a lot: the internal cross-enslavements, as the victims prey
on (or benignly control) each other, for example. Other aspects I don't:
Derek here seems . . . small. Smaller than his victims, anyway, and
while the degradation of seeing them subjugated by someone (IMO) unworthy
of them has a certain kick, over time it undermines the effect. Just my
subjectivity. - That said, he also adds touches of emotion here and
there, like the byplay of the sisters in the shower and Jess's reaction
at the end, that make this more than a set of MC-induced sex scenes. As
he's noted in the past, that may be purely unintentional, as he pursues
the goal--Arousal--that he's very clearly stated is the reason he does
all of this." Tribly else, 18 June 2000
Hi JR, Read "A
Warlock's Toys" in the EMCSA. Very nice.
I love the mysterious and powerful stranger theme, and the incest bit with
sisters was very hot; "Don't you understand!
I...I really need to cum bad. Could you...um... could you finger me?"
Nice dialogue in that section. Good story. Thanks." Nomdreserv,
Writer, 18 Jun 2000
"Loved your story 'Friends'
- thank you for making it available.....Ken,
9 Jun 2000"
is a really cool and interesting story. I enjoyed it immensly.
Any plans on continuing it"
Your Fan,mshah, 1 Jun 2000
"I just read the first two chapters of
- Vampiress. I usually don't forward
comments, but I am thoroughly enjoying your work."
6 Jun 2000
Hey! I just finished reading A
Witch Casts Her Spell - Part One. I
really enjoyed it but am on edge as to how it concludes. If the conclusion
is available, how might I get my hands on it? Thanks. PS -
You have a great website! I have yet to read a story of yours that
I didn't like. -- Chris, 1 Jun 2000