The Agency
by JR Parz

This particular story was inspired by Erotic Horror Novelist Russell E. Martin, who wrote SIX novels about an Organization that exerts control over females by enslaving them sexually.  It was also inspired by an Internet story called The Conditioners written by Marlissa.
 

Chapter 01: Recruitment Practices
Chapter 02: Roommates
Chapter 03: Ties That Bind

JR Parz

Some of the fan reviews on this series...


"What a terrific story (The Agency) Keep going -- I'm a BIG fan!!!" Marlissa, author of 'The Conditioners', 20 Nov 98

"Great Story (The Agency)!  Where do I apply!  Looking forward to future chapters!  Thanks."  FireFox, 21 Nov 98

"I just wanted to send you a note to tell you that I just finished reading "The Agency".  The set up was very well done and your descriptions of the woman were excellent.  I'm looking forward to several more chapters.  Good Writing!  Keep it up!" Trent Wolf, a writer, 30 Nov 98

I give "The Agency" a AAA rating... a real thriller!" ~master~, 30 Nov 98

"Great Job!!  ("The Agency") I too am a huge fan of the author Russ Martin and I'm glad to see there are others who respect his talent.  I always felt that he had a potential gold mine with his theme of possessed woman, but he was never promoted right by his publishers..." Blalvis, 2 Dec 98

"Excellent Story ("The Agency") JR Parz!  The notion of the girl being compelled to read the book and absorb the lessons
of her own subjugation was subtle... and the intelligence regulation was a nice touch." Ven, 2 Dec 98
Regarding 'The Agency, Roommates', "Terrific.  You are indeed on to a great story, but allow me to caution you about a few things however:  Never get too many characters in one of these sex stories.  Even in novels, I have found that six to eight main characters work best.  If you have more than that, the reader loses interest in the overall scope.  Graham Watkins, a writer I greatly admire, keeps the number of main characters in check, as does Laymon, as does Martin. It makes it easier for you too to focus on the erotic idiosyncrasies of each character.  Nevertheless, one shouldn't limit the number of characters to merely two either.  alt.sex.stories is filled with bad writers who have no concept of plotting multidimensional works.  You can have any number of small characters with small parts, but main characters really should be limited.  My favorite erotic novels usually involve three couples going on a vacation together: one couple is worldly, one naive, and one curious.  They wind up swapping partners.  (I am not a swinger, and don't think this is advisable for the health of the marriage, but it is erotic as hell to contemplate).  John Updike's "Couples" comes to mind.  You are good and getting better--and there is the element of suspense with Tracy and Gina (i.e., will they, or won't they?).  I am especially impressed with this computerization programming technique you use to condition the women.  That is a terrific angle and one I haven't seen in erotic horror before.  Bravo, for bringing that over from sci-fi.  I also applaud you on the use of compound/complex sentences.  It shows maturity as a writer.   Nothing bores me more than to read simple sentences in sex stories.  You are very creative, but you do need to add some more character traits.  Perhaps Tracy having a habit of biting her lower lip when nervous, or Gina having a habit of...whatever.  For a character to be fully appreciated a reader must have a lot of detail  (this is why I advise never getting too many characters in a story).   CHARACTER MAKES THE STORY SUSPENSE KEEPS THE READER READING.   Also, variety is a key I look for.  You have tapped into this by having Gina as a brunette and Tracy as a blonde, but don't forget that sometimes women in their 30s can be incredibly sexy as well.  Adversarial psychological profiles also works.  The good girl with the not-so-good girl.  The choirgirl with the cheerleader-that-did-the-team.  The possibilities are endless.  I encourage you to continue.  You are excellent and I think this is your best work.  I enjoyed it tremendously."  Eros, 29 Mar 99

"I read 'The Agency, Roommates' and really loved it.  I'm glad that you haven't made Dave and Max and the other members of the Agency into sex addicts or megalomaniacs like so many other stories do.  The number of stories where someone uses the kind of power the Agency offers to gain revenge on an old girlfriend or someone who rejected them is immense.  The number of stories where the same power is used to illicit love in someone the controller actually cares for is far too small. Thanks for helping to balance things out. Also, congratulations for leaving Gina and Tracy basically unaltered outside their attraction to their respective bosses. I've never understood stories where a guy is attracted to a girl but when he gets the chance, he drastically alters her personality to make her act completely different. You seem to have realized that, in the real world, attraction is more than physical and the things that made you like or love that person shouldn't be changed.  Although you state that your story is inspired by Marlissa's 'The Conditioners', I enjoyed your story much more because it didn't have many of the cruel streaks that 'The Conditioners' had (no offense to Marlissa, just my personal preferrence). I voted for 'The Agency' as my favorite story on your site and was disappointed when it only came in third in your poll but at least it placed. I look forward to part 3.  MC Writer, Writer, 1 Apr 99

"Hey JR,  i *loved* the agency, roommates.  some of your best writing yet.  very hot and something of an interesting departure from your usual mc proclivity in that the agency tries to fool the girls into thinking that they really love each other.  it'll be like the initial (& unfortunately underdeveloped) storyline in Marlissa's The Conditioners where the two girls start a torid relationship. I also really like the detail you put into the "programming."  ae, writer, 9 Apr 99

"Great story (The Agency)!  I have been collecting Russ Martin stories. The ones that I have are; education of jen... , rhea,... resurection of... obsession of ... devil and lisa black... the desacration of jessica young. Please forgive the spelling, I do not have them in front of me.. I also have a short story from alfred hic magazine.  There is anouther russ martin who wrote westerns.. I emailed him and he said that he was not the same author.  What else has R martin done? is there any info about him on the net? i have been looking. I was told that there was a collection of short stories from various authors in a book with the number 13 in the title.  He has supposed to have contributed to this.  also do you know if it was a pen name?  Also do you know about the Fritzen Ravenswood?  Thanks, and I will await Chaper III for the Agency!"  Jason, 19 Apr 99
Regarding The Agency:  "Great Story! I got wet imagining myself as 'Tracy'. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story." kris, 30 Apr 99

"I was finally able to bypass the search engine and just finished reading The Agency.  You know something funny?  I found this story VERY erotic, and yet there was not a lot of sex in it.  I think it must be the control aspect of it that I'm drawn to.  I must have some nasty submissive tendencies that need to be eliminated.  Anyway, I really like the way you think.  I do feel compelled to say that as a woman, I should find this horribly sexist and degrading.  But as a reader, I find myself extremely aroused.  This is very confusing.
But I think I need to read more."
patti, 6 May 99

Regarding 'The Agency'.  "I liked very much the saga "The Agency".  I'd like to know when are we going to have the pleasure of reading another chapter.  Are you writing it, JR Parz?  Is it ready?  Could you give us some details in advance?  Please, don't let us wait to long and keep doing a great job!"  Bonanza, 5 June 99
"Mr. Parz,  I hope that with this- my opus- a subgenre of its own has been firmly established between the twin fetishes of transformation and mind control. If I had to coin a term, I'd call it Nymph fiction, for the two aspects of  transformation of body and transformation of mind.  Pioneered by Downing Street, Joker, and yourself, it's a valid addition, I feel, to the ranks of Internet fetishes.  I do hope you get over that writer's block.  In the area of mind control, I would place you in my top 3 authors.  (The other two being Boris Ludmenkov and Downing Street.) 'The Agency,' even unfinished, ranks in my top 10."  SD, 3 Aug 99
"Hi !  I have just finished reading the The Agency and had to write to let you know how much I enjoyed it and how much I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter.  I am truely curious what Dave's job with the agency really is (patience is not my best attribute but I am trying...lol).   Best Wishes, Kelley, 16 Aug 99

"What a terrific story (The Agency)...well written with attention to detail that leaves the reader enthralled and wanting more.  And yes I want more!!!!  I have always been intrigued by mind controlling stories and the more erotic the better.  Yours has kept me very, very stimulated...thanks!" Anna, 2 Nov 99

"JR, Just wanted to drop you a line and let you know how much I liked "The Agency".  You've mentioned on the board that you thrive on the "Career Woman broken into Total Slave" premise, and your tale is a shining example."  Why Now, Writer, 26 Nov 99

"Looking forward to more of 'The Agency'...wish it was already done.  I can hardly wait!  I am a woman, even, and I enjoy your writing ability very much.  You're good.  Wonder if the women in your story will be able to overcome?  Peace and Love"  Fragile Thunder, 7 Dec 99

Trilby Else, the undisputed KING reviewer of the MC Forum, reviews "The Agency, The Ties that Bind":  At last--a personal thing for me, seeing how the story resumed.  Wanted to see what befell Tracey and Gina. Pretty much what I expected, and it was nice. :) JR balances exposition in his evil org. with the enjoyable torment of the slaves, and the insidious but insistent f/f urges in the new recruit are an interesting counterpoint to Tracey's breathless discovery.  Some hiccups as far as what's going on: while the interludes with Tom and others are hot to read, they're a bit disconnected. JR leads with a recommendation to check out earlier segments of this tale and its Early Years sibling, but there should be something here to explain who some of these characters are.  On the other hand, seeing Gina triggered by the 'honey' phrase of fond memory, and Tracey's head is an increasingly fun place to visit (if not perhaps to live, but even that's changing).  As usual, JR's cruel Mdoms are balanced by sympathetically-drawn victim/slaves, and there's both story and seduction to be found. Thanks, JR.

"Hey there!  This is the first time I have ever given feedback to an author.  So actually, I don't know what you may wish to learn from me.  What I can tell you is that "The Agency" is one of the best stories on the Net.  I can see that you don't know too much were to go with this story.  The sex scenes are good, the imagination is also well built.  I did like a lot "The book", but the more you read it the less sex scenes you get, I think this is a pitty.  You should go on with the new chapter in Australia for the nefew, but nerver forget the sex scenes and you don't need to find a governmental agency that will try to put these guys down.  I also believe you should not find a chemical way to dominate males also.  Hoping this is what you need to know from your readers, I remain." Yours, Robert ViauH, 3 Oct 2000

"Another fantastic work (Agency, The Ties that Bind), absolutely love the execution of the plot - as always very well done.  Also, the poll idea is neat.  Thank you for over 4 years of entertainment - i've followed your work since 4 years ago that is, i think."  Roy Goh, 7 Oct 2000

"Dear JRParz, You are the best author in the mind control erotic story field.  I think 'The Agency' is the best story over all that I have read.  You should think of getting your work published in some of the sex magazines. You are one of the best authors overall that I have read.  If you could write me back when you cum out with another chapter and so on."  Sincerely, M. Downes, 15 Oct 2000
"Hi.  I'm not sure why I'm writing you.  I hope this is the author of "The Agency" and that I have got the right e-mail address.  I love your work, which is probably odd since I'm a girl, and a lesbian at that--all more info than you needed I'm sure--I just wanted to thank you for writing something so liberating to my submissive side.  Please do not feel like you have to respond to this I just wanted to thank you.  Jane, 27 July 2002