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The girl next door got spanked today,
Exactly why, I cannot say.

Step-dad does it while mom is out,
I'm not sure what it's all about.

Fourteen, it seems, is just too old,
For corporal treatment, truth be told.

By that age she should get grounded,
Not have her naked bottom pounded!.

Although her ass must get so sore,
Why does he make her beg for more?

Perplexing most: really ought he
Spank her when she's not been naughty?

For tho' she behaves just as she should,
He even spanks her when she's good!

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Anonymous	6/7/2016	Nice bit of verse. It scans well except for a bit of a bump in the 6th verse where "oughtn't he" doesn't quite scan with naughty. Perhaps, Perplexing most: really ought he, Spank her when she isn't naughty? Good stories, by the way.
		You're right. I wrote a version of this a long time ago, and I have doggedly (doggerel-ly?), through revisions, been trying to retain the juxtaposition of when she's naughty and when she's not. Your correction suggests she's never naughty. Your version is better and I must abandon my stubborn position. I am changing it to your idea, although slightly different as should be reflected in the current version (once mine host, Chris Hailey, is able to effect). --Stepdaddy
		The change has been made. Note, replaced couplet was originally: Perplexing most: really, oughtn't he, Spank her only when she's naughty? I myself am not convinced I like the new better than the original; I'm a sucker for "off-rhymes" and "oughtn't he" with "naughty" was a fine one; now it is a more straight-forward rhyme, alas. The new one does definitely scan better, though. --Chris
Anonymous	6/8/2016	Dear Stepdaddy thank you for being concerned, but there's no need to worry... The reason he spanks me when Mom's not home Is I'll only let him when we're alone. I get so horny while I'm being beaten that afterwards I demand to be eaten. He licks my pussy and sucks on my clit So beautifully I can't get enough of it. If Mom was here she'd get so mad And I wouldn't be allowed my fun with Dad. He makes me cum, it feels divine And then we have a sixty-nine. I bought some condoms so we could fuck But he refused, just my luck. My fifteenth birthday is the date When we will finally get to mate. So for a few more months you'll hear his hand connecting with my rear. Any screams you notice after that Will be because his dick's in my twat.
		Thanks for response, formed poetical Proposing answers theoretical But angle taken -- come now, really? Outrageous to the point of silly! Suggesting background, as contextual, Declaring truth as something sexual! You advance what logic daren't: Sex between a girl and parent? That can't be, it's plainly seen, On top of that, she's but fourteen! You think devotion step-parental Succumbs to drives more elemental? Last objection clears the stage: Why he's at least three times her age! [Thanks for your take on this mystery -- SD]

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